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by MonsieurMoustache
Fri Oct 31, 2014 1:10 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: The Great Rash
Replies: 3
Views: 1445

Re: The Great Rash

Uck in a good way.
by MonsieurMoustache
Fri Oct 31, 2014 1:06 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: The New Adventures of Chance and Probability Bob
Replies: 7
Views: 2168

Re: The New Adventures of Chance and Probability Bob

I can't entirely put my finger on it, but I this is instantly one of my fave drabbles. It just kept surprising me until the very end. It also helped that I read it in my sarcastic old British man inner voice. Really fun. If I could make one suggestion, could you put your comments underneath the Drab...
by MonsieurMoustache
Fri Oct 31, 2014 12:56 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Quickly! Swiftly!
Replies: 4
Views: 1811

Re: When Staying Still Is Death

I enjoyed the imagery, and how a nice a little snippet it is. I must've read it five times by now trying to put it all together; but in a good way. I'm curious about the winged herd. Pegasi? Quick spelling thing: Lightning instead of lightening. As for title, how about "Another Day"? Just what poppe...
by MonsieurMoustache
Tue Oct 28, 2014 6:45 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Nice Costume (Hallowe'en theme)
Replies: 8
Views: 2375

Re: Nice Costume (Hallowe'en theme)

Love it.
by MonsieurMoustache
Sat Oct 25, 2014 10:04 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Welcoming Committee (Halloween)
Replies: 9
Views: 2498

Re: Welcoming Committee (Halloween)

Hmm, I grew up thinking the house usually gave you a Trick or a Treat. Rarely I did get a trick - a magician performed card tricks for each batch of kids, and someone else gave a box of candy with a note inside to the tune of 'Hah-hah, no candy for you, loser'. I think another time a man at the door...
by MonsieurMoustache
Thu Oct 23, 2014 12:56 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: The Secret Histories Of His Species [Category: Cnsprcy Thrs]
Replies: 7
Views: 1850

Re: The Secret Histories Of His Species [Category: Cnsprcy T

I actually thought this was a bit of a bait-and-switch, where we assume the cleric is part of the human species in the future, doing the usual wah-humans-are-terrible routine, but then it turns out he was never human to begin with. Implying what? That an alien species has the same problem? Or perhap...
by MonsieurMoustache
Thu Oct 23, 2014 12:52 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Strange Beasts
Replies: 9
Views: 3093

Re: Strange Beasts

swamp wrote:I'm working on this for the Dribblecast.

I look forward to it!
by MonsieurMoustache
Wed Oct 22, 2014 1:59 am
Forum: Twit-Fic!
Topic: Post your Twitfic Twabbles Here! (General Content)
Replies: 7528
Views: 867288

Re: Post your Twitfic Twabbles Here! (General Content)

He was jealous of his girlfriend, who never got sick. He was sure she'd outlive him. Then the Re:ELLE computer virus hit.
by MonsieurMoustache
Wed Oct 22, 2014 12:36 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Right Time, Wrong Place (Halloween)
Replies: 9
Views: 3252

Re: Right Time, Wrong Place (Halloween)

Sorry, Sunner. I misread your data on the side, don't ask me how. You've been here longer than me! Glad to hear the paratime police are giving you some time off.
by MonsieurMoustache
Tue Oct 21, 2014 6:10 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Right Time, Wrong Place (Halloween)
Replies: 9
Views: 3252

Re: Right Time, Wrong Place

Hello, Sunner, and welcome to the forums.
by MonsieurMoustache
Fri Oct 17, 2014 11:52 pm
Forum: Twit-Fic!
Topic: Post your Twitfic Twabbles Here! (General Content)
Replies: 7528
Views: 867288

Re: Post your Twitfic Twabbles Here! (General Content)

The cage is the one place it won't go. She sleeps there in its stale smells. Waiting for the return of morning and silence.
by MonsieurMoustache
Fri Oct 17, 2014 9:18 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Exactly 100 Words
Replies: 10
Views: 2031

Re: Exactly 100 Words

I enjoyed the weird characters. It's intriguing to see what it builds to. I'd encourage more playing around with this type of drabble, it has a lot of potential.
by MonsieurMoustache
Mon Oct 13, 2014 6:47 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: The Door
Replies: 9
Views: 2204

Re: The Door

Ooo, I really like this one. The imagery is tantalizingly dark.
by MonsieurMoustache
Mon Oct 13, 2014 6:44 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: It Happens
Replies: 13
Views: 2347

Re: It Happens

I did not see that. Now I can read this in an entirely new light. Pfft.
by MonsieurMoustache
Sat Oct 11, 2014 9:05 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Life's little pleasures
Replies: 13
Views: 1976

Re: Life's little pleasures

I liked Granny Smith. It let me know what kind if pies she was making. Sorry, cakes. Grandma Smith was subtle enough that it didn't distract, and it's an amusing name. I enjoy her description and character a lot and that just adds an extra bit of flavour. I like the Drabble, but I'm a little confuse...
by MonsieurMoustache
Sat Oct 11, 2014 9:01 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: It Happens
Replies: 13
Views: 2347

Re: It Happens

pondspider wrote:I just realised the title's significance. Good one Mr Tash :)
I'm curious as to what your interpretation was.
by MonsieurMoustache
Fri Oct 10, 2014 10:20 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: DIY Spaceship Repair (Asshole Samaritan Theme)
Replies: 19
Views: 6325

Re: DIY Spaceship Repair (Asshole Samaritan Theme)

Oh, and I should mention that my very first drabble here was for the Good Samaritan Theme, so this definitely feels like a touchstone. I actually made it to mirror that one, which is called Bunking with Bovines.
by MonsieurMoustache
Fri Oct 10, 2014 10:11 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Hitomi Can See You [Category: Halloween]
Replies: 14
Views: 2494

Re: Hitomi Can See You [Category: Halloween]

Huh... I always assumed it was to do with making beef jerky. Or possibly a very violent method of laundry.
by MonsieurMoustache
Fri Oct 10, 2014 1:22 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Hitomi Can See You [Category: Halloween]
Replies: 14
Views: 2494

Re: Hitomi Can See You [Category: Halloween]

What I mean is the original started with introducing Hitomi, and then we saw the body. So we meet a character wanting to kill someone for their eyes, and she kills someone for their eyes, the end. Your definition states "If something is "cut and dry", it is said to be completed without debate, quest...
by MonsieurMoustache
Fri Oct 10, 2014 12:38 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Hitomi Can See You [Category: Halloween]
Replies: 14
Views: 2494

Re: Hitomi Can See You [Category: Halloween]

I do like the new order of the paragraphs. It feels more mysterious and less cut and dry. I still feel like the abrupt shift could be a more fluid transition - something connecting the scene to the legend, perhaps visual or sensual. You could go from the 'eyes' final line to Hitomi holding them, or ...