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by unseentangerine
Sat Nov 08, 2014 5:27 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Making a Cryogenic Omelet
Replies: 2
Views: 1538

Re: Making a Cryogenic Omelet

You make quite the good narrative, a lot of story in a drabble, I think. And your profile picture looks like a King Crimson album cover, 3 stars
by unseentangerine
Wed Nov 05, 2014 11:20 pm
Forum: Podcasts and suchforth
Topic: Drabcast
Replies: 3
Views: 2903

Drabcast

What if someone made a podcast featuring long-form non-fiction and instead if a green tentacle their logo was a grey line and instead of creative stories they ran articles about the history of doily arrangement and instead of original music they played arpeggios of various scales on a bassoon and in...
by unseentangerine
Wed Nov 05, 2014 9:22 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Attending to the Dead
Replies: 2
Views: 1697

Re: Attending to the Dead

lol,
"Here's you ninepence."
"I'm not dead, I'm not dead."
"He says he not dead."
"No, he'll be stone dead in a moment."
"I don't want to go on the cart."
"You're not foolin' anybody."
"I feel happy! I feel happy!"
(cudgel to the head)
by unseentangerine
Wed Nov 05, 2014 10:51 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: With Great Power Comes Greater Sensitivity (super stressors)
Replies: 2
Views: 1403

Re: With Great Power Comes Greater Sensitivity (super stress

pondspider wrote:Alt title: "The Big Sulk".
********the Incredible Sulk :D
by unseentangerine
Wed Nov 05, 2014 9:24 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: With Great Power Comes Greater Sensitivity (super stressors)
Replies: 2
Views: 1403

With Great Power Comes Greater Sensitivity (super stressors)

God I hate people. 'Swhy I gotta hide at the bottom of this ink-squirtin' ocean! Can't get any peace, I wish a million of those little carcass eaters would just finish me off—for good. I'd do it myself but I don't even have the energy. I'll just lie here in these murky depths forever. . . . I can't ...
by unseentangerine
Wed Nov 05, 2014 12:29 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Making the Rounds
Replies: 10
Views: 2667

Re: Making the Rounds

I agree with unseentangerine. The "(field not yet decided)" indicates a novice / student scientist. When we learn she's not where she imagines herself to be, it clicks. I'm probably being dense, but I can't get my head around the intent behind the following... She knew something about this world, a...
by unseentangerine
Tue Nov 04, 2014 2:31 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Last Thoughts
Replies: 6
Views: 2177

Re: Last Thoughts

OK, first of all, metalcapitiller is one epic name. (I'd say even beating out Bitey the Snake.) Second, "Susan didn’t like the way that the man in the cupcake thong was staring at her." is one epic opening sentence. Third, this is one whole epic drabble. Nice job. :mrgreen:
by unseentangerine
Mon Nov 03, 2014 4:24 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: C & PB: The Abandonded Mime Field
Replies: 2
Views: 1811

C & PB: The Abandonded Mime Field

Chance and Bob loved clodhopping. “Don't go reeling through the mime field, boys,” squawked Bob's mother, “ever!” They put on their clodhopping attire and took off running for the mime field. Green grasses swayed as the boys played. But Chance's glee evaporated. A white-gloved hand shot up threw the...
by unseentangerine
Mon Nov 03, 2014 2:12 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Grief is a Winding Road; Regret, an Endless Labyrinth
Replies: 12
Views: 5685

Re: Grief is a Winding Road; Regret, an Endless Labyrinth

ROU Killing Time wrote:I'd change one line (the first "imagines") to "he hears their screams" to avoid the double imagine use.
That's a 103 word drabble. I think that he really meant to convey a continuation of one thought across two sentences. In which case the use of two of the same word is most appropriate.
by unseentangerine
Sat Nov 01, 2014 8:31 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Just Another Shaggy Dog Story
Replies: 4
Views: 2061

Re: Just Another Shaggy Dog Story

EEK! Your tale of tails used the wrong kind of tails! Butt, I enjoyed the ending :o
by unseentangerine
Sat Nov 01, 2014 6:25 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Chasing the Wind
Replies: 0
Views: 2051

Chasing the Wind

Knife and fork caused a black liquorice lava cake to erupt. His second martini was satiating. He would have a hot bath and dream of the falling snow outside. The stars had become unbelievably bright, and the milky way was more than words. He had time now; drawing, painting, singing, reading. But he ...
by unseentangerine
Fri Oct 31, 2014 7:38 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Making the Rounds
Replies: 10
Views: 2667

Re: Making the Rounds

I disagree. when I read, A young scientist (field not yet decided), I saw clearly in my mind a bright-eyed, hopeful, idealistic young person headed off to college or from college looking forward like the whole world was before them. And then when you said there was a formula in her head and it was s...
by unseentangerine
Fri Oct 31, 2014 7:30 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: The New Adventures of Chance and Probability Bob
Replies: 7
Views: 2669

Re: The New Adventures of Chance and Probability Bob

I had in my head one of the more madcap Playstation games, like Abe's Oddysee . No core-laugh for me, but smiles galore. great, now I'm all nostalgic. I was already thinking about pokemon red and blue because, to my horror, I realized my brother has never actually played pokemon. Abe's Oddysee? Nev...
by unseentangerine
Fri Oct 31, 2014 7:29 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Quickly! Swiftly!
Replies: 4
Views: 2241

Re: When Staying Still Is Death

Ooh ooh!
"Listen to the Color of Your Dreams"?
or
"Blown On A Steel Breeze"?
or
"Because the Wind is High It Blows My Mind"?

I like naming stories after already meaningful phrases like song lyrics or idioms because it makes the title carry a whole other cloud of imagination. IMHO
by unseentangerine
Fri Oct 31, 2014 7:12 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Making the Rounds
Replies: 10
Views: 2667

Re: Making the Rounds

This one is good. I wish I had written it.
by unseentangerine
Fri Oct 31, 2014 7:09 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: The Mines
Replies: 2
Views: 1681

Re: The Mines

SpareInch wrote:Where I come from, they cap old mines with concrete.

This is the reason why. :evil:
where I come from they cap our way to the surface with concrete. :wink:
by unseentangerine
Fri Oct 31, 2014 7:07 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Diary of the World's End
Replies: 3
Views: 1839

Re: Diary of the World's End

". . . heated in the roaring pyres where our churches once stood." and use of the word rended made this enjoyable for me to read but the whole thing was pretty good too :O
by unseentangerine
Fri Oct 31, 2014 6:12 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: The New Adventures of Chance and Probability Bob
Replies: 7
Views: 2669

Re: The New Adventures of Chance and Probability Bob

I can't entirely put my finger on it, but I this is instantly one of my fave drabbles. It just kept surprising me until the very end. It also helped that I read it in my sarcastic old British man inner voice. Really fun. If I could make one suggestion, could you put your comments underneath the Dra...
by unseentangerine
Thu Oct 30, 2014 2:45 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: The New Adventures of Chance and Probability Bob
Replies: 7
Views: 2669

Re: The New Adventures of Chance and Probability Bob

PB&Jellyphish320 wrote:I feel like Bob and Chance are also some kind of animal. Am I wrong?
yes
by unseentangerine
Mon Oct 27, 2014 2:42 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Final request
Replies: 7
Views: 2897

Re: Final request

this one hits home for me