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by Cwpants
Tue Oct 22, 2013 3:55 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Shootin the Breeze
Replies: 1
Views: 749

Re: Shootin the Breeze

I like the weird, country vibe of the story. It makes you wonder if the old man knows something nobody else does or if he's just old and crazy. Lol My suggestions: I'd take out the "and" in the first sentence and make it into two sentences. Saying that the sound was incomplete without the click of t...
by Cwpants
Fri Oct 18, 2013 5:58 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Thoughts At the Mirror
Replies: 2
Views: 546

Re: Thoughts At the Mirror

Hahaha I didn't notice that, Strawman, but it works! I just reread this and I wanna tinker with it later when I have time. I used "body" too often.
by Cwpants
Fri Oct 18, 2013 5:17 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Thoughts At the Mirror
Replies: 2
Views: 546

Thoughts At the Mirror

I came not to the decision lightly. Though it wasn’t really a decision at all, as I saw no other options. It started an infrequent event, whilst staring at the computer or television. As time progressed, so did the twitch. My eye, like a thing possessed, followed not the natural rhythms of my body, ...
by Cwpants
Thu Oct 17, 2013 5:45 pm
Forum: Twit-Fic!
Topic: Post your Twitfic Twabbles Here! (General Content)
Replies: 7953
Views: 1499670

Re: Many hands make light work

Moving in. 9 flights of stairs. Offer to lend a hand. I wish I'd gotten his name or digits. This thing's starting to smell. Aw, man, he gave you the hand without the digits? Talk about rude! :P I know it was an unnecessary pun...but I couldn't help myself!!! Plus, I thought Varda would get a chuckl...
by Cwpants
Thu Oct 17, 2013 4:58 pm
Forum: Twit-Fic!
Topic: Post your Twitfic Twabbles Here! (General Content)
Replies: 7953
Views: 1499670

Many hands make light work

Moving in. 10 flights of stairs.
He offered to lend a hand.
I wish I got his name or digits.
This thing's starting to smell.

Edit: Fixed confusion in line 2.
by Cwpants
Thu Oct 17, 2013 4:11 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Our Zombie Apocalypse Pact (Somebody's Gotta Do It Theme)
Replies: 6
Views: 1608

Re: Our Zombie Apocalypse Pact (Somebody's Gotta Do It Theme

Varda wrote:Yes, but you only want me for my brains.
Love love LOVE this line! :))
by Cwpants
Thu Oct 17, 2013 4:02 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: All These Worlds Are Yours
Replies: 9
Views: 2658

Re: All These Worlds Are Yours

I didnt get the reference until reading the comments. Loved the word choice on this one. it read like the army. In fact, i could almost imagine snake doc from the unit reading this one. I do not know what the actor's name is but he does the allstate commercials now days. Yes!! I got goodebumps at i...
by Cwpants
Sun Oct 13, 2013 3:29 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Sparkle Party
Replies: 3
Views: 996

Re: Sparkle Party

Absurdly lovely! Hahaha
by Cwpants
Fri Oct 11, 2013 2:54 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: All These Worlds Are Yours
Replies: 9
Views: 2658

Re: All These Worlds Are Yours

Ha! Just saw this! Thank you, Varda!!
by Cwpants
Thu Oct 10, 2013 4:49 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Serial Killer Terrorizes City
Replies: 10
Views: 2689

Re: Serial Killer Terrorizes City

Strange as this thread is, it does illustrate the absolute importance of cultural frame of reference. Max Schreck... Bella Lugosi... Lon Cheney... Dick Cheney... Robert Pattinson...???? LOLZ @ Dick Cheney Shudders @ Robert Pattenson You are absolutely right! There are so many different "versions" o...
by Cwpants
Thu Oct 10, 2013 4:21 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: South of Heaven
Replies: 11
Views: 2967

Re: South of Heaven

Though I am not positive, I believe there should be commas after "below" and "above."

Also, the second "up" in the first paragraph seems redundant to me. Though when trying to reach 100 words, I understand it's necessity!
by Cwpants
Thu Oct 10, 2013 4:12 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Serial Killer Terrorizes City
Replies: 10
Views: 2689

Re: Serial Killer Terrorizes City

. So, in terms of interior logic, the "Fatal error" part doesn't make sense. The Elder is a fellow vampire, no? Is there some vampire taboo that discourages creating more vampires? Or is it just a mistake to be talking about interior logic here? :) Good question. I guess I imagine the counsel is bl...
by Cwpants
Thu Oct 10, 2013 3:22 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Serial Killer Terrorizes City
Replies: 10
Views: 2689

Re: Serial Killer Terrorizes City

Hmmm...I got rid of the original title because I thought it was hokey but perhaps it made that clearer. The original title read: CHANNEL 3 BREAKING NEWS: Serial Killer Terrorizes City This young, inexperienced vampire attacked her would-be assailant and inadvertently turned him into a vampire. He pr...
by Cwpants
Thu Oct 10, 2013 3:13 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: South of Heaven
Replies: 11
Views: 2967

Re: South of Heaven

With my moral compass as a guide, the road hell is paved with good intentions. I disagree. <--see signature below :P--> I really like the story. It makes me want to know more about the character. Why would he work so hard to get to hell? I like the idea of the moral compass being portrayed as an ac...
by Cwpants
Thu Oct 10, 2013 3:06 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Serial Killer Terrorizes City
Replies: 10
Views: 2689

Re: CHANNEL 3 BREAKING NEWS: Serial Killer Terrorizes City

Flintknapper wrote:Strange. I am ususally not a big dialogue only fan, but in this case, I would work with it to get rid of Luna lowering eyes in shame and make it dialogue only.
Thanks for the suggestion! I've worked the eliminate those words and make the story dialogue only. You were definitely correct!
by Cwpants
Fri Sep 27, 2013 6:09 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: ...a Thought Experiment.
Replies: 7
Views: 2110

Re: ...a Thought Experiment.

Hahahaha! I adore this! Thank you for sharing!!
by Cwpants
Fri Sep 27, 2013 5:56 pm
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Serial Killer Terrorizes City
Replies: 10
Views: 2689

Serial Killer Terrorizes City

Edited per suggestion. Thank you!! “I asked him to stop. He didn’t listen, sir.” “When he continued, you followed modus operandi?” “I did, Elder Drear. I bared my teeth and attempted to cast intimidation. He persisted.” “Please, Luna, tell the council what happened next.” “The door behind him was t...
by Cwpants
Wed Sep 25, 2013 2:00 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Exponential Growth (Simulation theme)
Replies: 13
Views: 4375

Re: Exponential Growth (Simulations theme)

Talk about population control....
by Cwpants
Wed Sep 25, 2013 1:55 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: Making New Friends (Simulation Theme)
Replies: 6
Views: 1623

Re: Making New Friends (Simulation Theme)

Poor, strange Nolan....

I like it! Creepy :D
by Cwpants
Tue Sep 24, 2013 3:30 am
Forum: Drabbles
Topic: All These Worlds Are Yours
Replies: 9
Views: 2658

Re: All These Worlds Are Yours

strawman wrote:Yes. Thinking this drabble might have that as a backstory.
When I wrote this, my mind was actually in the realm of 2010: Odyssey Two by Arthur C. Clarke.