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Drabblecast 150 - Morris and the Machine

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 1:26 am
by Kevin Anderson
Drabble- Break Up
by J. Alan Pierce

Morris and the Machine
by Tim Pratt

"The lock," she said, loud enough to cut me off. "The lock is sort of why I'm thinking about leaving you." She stalked toward me, drink in hand, and I stood up, edging around the table to the far side, closer to the basement door. I wanted to keep the table between us. "You scamper down there after dinner every night. Lock your door and work on the mystery machine, right, Morris, the one that's going to change everything and make us rich, right? That machine?"

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Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 2:23 am
by ROU Killing Time
I could say so much about this episode, but I'll sum it up by saying that the rest of the year will be a search for numbers 2 through 5 in my 2010 Peoples Choice votes.

It was sad. It was beautiful.

As for the 100 word story; I resemble that drabble.

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 3:55 am
by poorturtle
dug it! great episode!

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 4:21 am
by Mr. Tweedy
I have got to catch up again... (Still on "Cassie.")

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 4:26 am
by dreamrock
Oh, man. I love it. It's rare to see a time travel story that doesn't use the cliché movie scifi time travel, but instead uses a more quantum basis. I hatehatehate the movie time travel stuff with a passion.

The ending felt a little abrupt, but I've got no other complaints.

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 4:51 am
by Talia
Saw where it was going, but still found it very sweet and sad. Now I'm melancholy, time to go cheer myself up with pictures of puppies.

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:36 am
by feste451
I agree with Dreamrock. Quantum travel through the multiverse makes more sense than moving forward or backward along a linear path (worked wonderfully in Babel Probe, though).

I have to admit to taking the wife's side on this one. As an inventor, he created for the future but in the end, existed only for the past oblivious to the fact he was responsible for his present. However, quantum probability provides a miniscule chance he will hit his own timeline before everything goes to seed, so that should give him hope.

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:47 am
by Damp_Obsession
Wow....just, Wow. I really loved this one. It's definitely my favorite episode...ever. I got chills so many times.

-raucous applause- This one was really a work of art!

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 6:08 am
by tbaker2500
How very, very sad.

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 7:28 am
by moonowl
So sad.

I think this is less about time travel and more about longing for youth, vigor and the feeling of new romance. Compared to long term relationships which seem to be about paying your bills, doing taxes and who is going to shovel the 20" of snow this time.I've been hitched for awhile and we are happy, but your spouse is never quite the fresh faced teen that you first fell for. In truth, neither are you. It's not a bad thing, growing old together, but who wouldn't want to take a trip back?

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 7:30 am
by munsi
incredibly sad! i love it, it's a beautiful piece. easily my favorite story on here since The Great Old Pumpkin.

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 7:40 am
by themorg
feste451 wrote:I agree with Dreamrock. Quantum travel through the multiverse makes more sense than moving forward or backward along a linear path (worked wonderfully in Babel Probe, though).

I have to admit to taking the wife's side on this one. As an inventor, he created for the future but in the end, existed only for the past oblivious to the fact he was responsible for his present. However, quantum probability provides a miniscule chance he will hit his own timeline before everything goes to seed, so that should give him hope.
it is much more fun for in the multi-verse.

This one was super super great. Loved it

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 10:16 am
by mewse
After listening to the Drabblecast for yonks, I finally had to register for the forums today just so that I could chime in and agree with the other commenters about how fantastic and poignant this story was.

I also love how the story doesn't hammer home its twist ending, but instead just gives the reader a few gentle nudges, and then artfully drapes it out to one side, to perhaps be noticed in the final moments of the story, but never called attention to. Mr. Pratt, my hat is off to you.

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 4:41 pm
by tbaker2500
Welcome mewse!

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:14 pm
by swamp
Tim Pratt is a force to be reckoned with. This story combined the coolness of time travel with poigniancy of how love needs our attention in order to prosper. Morris was so caught up in rediscovering what was "lost" that he couldn't realize that he was the one who was causing it to be lost. It is natural for us to look back and fanatsize about how good things were in the past. However, when we were in the past, we dreamed about how good things would be in the future. We tend to overlook our present and, as feste451 said, that is what we are most responsible for, and what we have the most control over. Very good story! The timing of everything was perfect.

As for the twabble, it is wonderful to be chosen, but part of me wonders if that's the one I want to be remembered for. :lol: Guess that means I will have to keep writing more. (it's a hard group to keep up with)

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:23 pm
by Raptor Redux
Sweet story, and sad, and well done. Love the reading and the voices. I can see why he kept going back into the past, because I don't see him having much of a future to look forward to.

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:54 pm
by moonowl
swamp wrote: As for the twabble, it is wonderful to be chosen, but part of me wonders if that's the one I want to be remembered for. :lol: Guess that means I will have to keep writing more. (it's a hard group to keep up with)
Sorry Swamp but I really enjoyed the Twabble! It's the humor we all needed so we didn't go hang ourselves at the end.

Plus it reminded me of a friend who moved to NOLA. Monkeys and all.

Oh, this episode made me go to lump sum donor to $5 donor...if it helps to donate in this way more. Especially if it ups the pay to authors like Tim, Abbie and Jeremiah.

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 5:59 pm
by tbaker2500
moonowl wrote:Oh, this episode made me go to lump sum donor to $5 donor...if it helps to donate in this way more. Especially if it ups the pay to authors like Tim, Abbie and Jeremiah.
Props, Moonowl!
Yes it really helps. It's the difference between having a weekly paycheck, or instead playing the lottery. It's hard to forecast when you bank on the lottery.

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 6:01 pm
by moonowl
tbaker2500 wrote:
moonowl wrote:Oh, this episode made me go to lump sum donor to $5 donor...if it helps to donate in this way more. Especially if it ups the pay to authors like Tim, Abbie and Jeremiah.
Props, Moonowl!
Yes it really helps. It's the difference between having a weekly paycheck, or instead playing the lottery. It's hard to forecast when you bank on the lottery.
I didn't think about it that way until Norm kinda spelled it out. (That's why I posted, not wahoo! look at me.)
I mean *I'd* rather have money now then money later, but it makes sense if you run a podcast. Plus this way I won't forget to throw more money in the DC piggy now and then.

Re: Drabblecast 150- Morris and the Machine by Tim Pratt

Posted: Fri Feb 12, 2010 7:05 pm
by swamp
moonowl wrote:
swamp wrote: As for the twabble, it is wonderful to be chosen, but part of me wonders if that's the one I want to be remembered for. :lol: Guess that means I will have to keep writing more. (it's a hard group to keep up with)
Sorry Swamp but I really enjoyed the Twabble! It's the humor we all needed so we didn't go hang ourselves at the end.
Oh, don't get me wrong. I am tickled to have the twabble featured and read by Norm. I just think it's funny. I never thought twice about it getting beyond the twabble thread. It was a joke between me and a friend. The image just wouldn't go away, so I thought I'd share.