I thought this story was clever, well-told, and chilling, with a nice ending. But one thing kept me from enjoying it: the strange and alienating misogynistic undertones. The main female character, "the woman", is characterized as stupid and passive and obsessed with teh babiiez, which makes sense given that she's being brainwashed. What didn't work for me was the narrator's not-so-thinly veiled contempt of her as a result. A contempt that really emerges and escalates when he's cock-blocked. And then, after she's no longer sexually available, you get his fantasies about bashing her face in, justified by the fact that she's helping the invaders, which is silly given that practically everyone's being brainwashed except the lucky few who've been contacted by the other voice.
I was ready to give all of that a pass until the end of the story, in which our narrator gets rewarded for saving humanity when a sexually available woman willing to bear his offspring falls into his arms. This was just way too much of the "women exist for sex and babies" theme to let it pass, and IMHO, lazy storytelling.
Perhaps this was entirely intentional on the author's part - unreliable narrator and all of that - but if so, the misogynistic thread added nothing to the story for me personally. It unintentionally epitomized some of the ongoing problems we have in the sci-fi world with gender. I'm all about liberal creative license and am not arguing for political correctness or such - just that there's a problem when an author, unable to figure out how to write women like human beings, resorts to the old "men are characters, women are plot devices" fallback. It's just weak storytelling and needlessly alienating.
I now present myself for ritual disembowelment.
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