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Drabblecast 263 – Betty Flesh And The Meat Man

Posted: Sat Nov 17, 2012 8:20 am
by StalinSays
Feature: Betty Flesh and the Meat Man by Damon Shaw
Drabble: My Wife, the Star by PhineasQB

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Friday, November 16th, 2012
“Your suitor’s here!” Ma Flesh hurried into the back room of the butcher’s shop. “Are you presentable?”

Betty waited there amongst the swinging, marbled yellow cow carcasses. The wooden butcher’s table was smooth under her fingertips, and solid as the earth. Knives glinted from the walls, each reflecting a tiny, seated Betty and the thin figure of Ma Flesh standing over her.

“Sit up straight,” Ma snapped. “And don’t scratch. It could lead to tragedy. I mean it.”

“I won’t.” Betty didn't dare ask why Ma was so against scratching. Her head itched but she didn't lift her hand. Ma had cut off Betty’s hair to stop her from being so floaty. She hoped the suitor liked short hair. If he was blind, he’d like it, she thought. She could lay her head in his lap and he could tell her mood by the bumps on her skull. He could stroke behind her ears, let his fingers drift up to her crown, slide down her neck–

“It isn't Saturday.” Ma rapped on Betty’s head with the back of her shining metal hook. “No going floaty today, girl.”


Art by Bo Kaier
Music by Greenskeepers, Lotion (special closing music)

Twabble: “ She promised to show me her best trick that night in the bedroom. What a joke that was. She can't even guess the right card. ” by uncre8d1

Re: Drabblecast 263 – Betty Flesh And The Meat Man

Posted: Mon Nov 19, 2012 1:13 am
by munsi
I really dug this. The prose was lyrical and evocative, the plot was simple yet profoundly bizarre, and my heart went out to Betty. Beautiful, I really dug it...

Re: Drabblecast 263 – Betty Flesh And The Meat Man

Posted: Mon Nov 19, 2012 3:57 pm
by chemistryguy
I think I need another listen to wrap my head around this one.

Another note:
I checked again this morning and determined I was indeed made out of meat.

Re: Drabblecast 263 – Betty Flesh And The Meat Man

Posted: Mon Nov 19, 2012 4:49 pm
by strawman
Does your baloney have a first name?

Re: Drabblecast 263 – Betty Flesh And The Meat Man

Posted: Thu Nov 22, 2012 2:08 pm
by El Barto
Loved it. Gorgeous sweet sleepy love story.

Re: Drabblecast 263 – Betty Flesh And The Meat Man

Posted: Tue Nov 27, 2012 4:20 pm
by Unblinking
I read this one in slush and passed it up. Love it, love it, love it. My only complaint when I read it slush was that I got very confused when she suddenly fell down his shirt, but since her reaction is also confusion it does make sense, and this time I was watching for it.

It does a very good job taking several reversals changing the nature of the story in really cool ways:
1. Family Obligation--Girl pressured to seek suitor when she doesn't really want one.
2. Adventure--Girl is inexplicably in sudden danger from suitor's scratching fingers
3. Romantic--Girl falls in love with suitor
4. Tragedy--Girl accidentally crushes suitor to death
5. Coming to Terms with Death--Girl instead of following family obligation, instead finds her own way in the world.

The moment when she crushes his body against her breast is an incredible twist. It'd been long enough since I read it in slush that I'd mostly forgotten about that. As with my original reading, I thought it an interesting twist when she felt him under her shirt, but I figured that since she'd just been through the same she would have the presence of mind. But in one unthinking moment, smush! Holy crap, that still got me.

Re: Drabblecast 263 – Betty Flesh And The Meat Man

Posted: Wed Nov 28, 2012 11:39 am
by Kibitzer
Unblinking wrote:I read this one in slush and passed it up.
Sorry to be a foreign pest (as in, not speaking your brand of "English"), but "passed it up" in this context means:
(a) passed it up the chain of command and recommended it be purchased OR
(b) passed it up, as in, passed on this one, as in, voted NO on this one.

I'm sure one feels it is obvious from the context, but that could be read as "thought it was crap but now I love it."

Re: Drabblecast 263 – Betty Flesh And The Meat Man

Posted: Wed Nov 28, 2012 11:42 am
by Kibitzer
I loved this one. It was unexpectedly lyrical, poetic and engrossing. At first I really had no idea what was going on but it was sufficiently interesting to continue with. I then went from "oh, a match made in Heaven" to "oh. as little as that and dreams die (sob)."

Awesome.

Re: Drabblecast 263 – Betty Flesh And The Meat Man

Posted: Wed Nov 28, 2012 1:26 pm
by strawman
I agree with both comments. This particular story has enough weakness and strength, thinness and depth, to be passed up in either sense, and then enjoyed on a second go-round. And if it inspires just one other person to spend a day conceiving of everyone they see as a hunk of meat, there may be hope for finally understanding the Jeffrey Dahmers of this world.
Or the Hugh Hefners.

Re: Drabblecast 263 – Betty Flesh And The Meat Man

Posted: Wed Nov 28, 2012 3:57 pm
by Unblinking
Kibitzer wrote:
Unblinking wrote:I read this one in slush and passed it up.
Sorry to be a foreign pest (as in, not speaking your brand of "English"), but "passed it up" in this context means:
(a) passed it up the chain of command and recommended it be purchased OR
(b) passed it up, as in, passed on this one, as in, voted NO on this one.

I'm sure one feels it is obvious from the context, but that could be read as "thought it was crap but now I love it."
No, you're right, looking back at the phrase, it's ambiguous to me as a reader even though I knew exactly what I meant as a writer. By "passed it up" I mean passed it up the DC reading heirarchy, as in recommending it to Nathaniel.

Re: Drabblecast 263 – Betty Flesh And The Meat Man

Posted: Wed Nov 28, 2012 4:51 pm
by tbaker2500
Er, what?
I just don't get this story. Production was fun, but hard to grasp onto it.

Great drabble. Song was great, good to hear new stuff. Norm, was that you singing? Didn't sound like you at all.

Re: Drabblecast 263 – Betty Flesh And The Meat Man

Posted: Fri Nov 30, 2012 5:25 am
by Talia
One of the most spectacularly weird stories I've heard on here. Fantastic stuff, though sad. Great imagery.

Re: Drabblecast 263 – Betty Flesh And The Meat Man

Posted: Wed Dec 05, 2012 11:44 pm
by jason todd
tbaker2500 wrote:Er, what?
I just don't get this story. Production was fun, but hard to grasp onto it.

Great drabble. Song was great, good to hear new stuff. Norm, was that you singing? Didn't sound like you at all.
aggread it was weird witch i like as long as it has some depth or an idea behind it but it seemed kinda pointlessly random