I like audio drama. Back before DC, I listened to the story station on XM, "where the pictures are in your head".
I think I would have done this one a little different. First, it's true about timing. I don't care for the narrator reading "the dogs barked" and suddenly hearing the clip of dogs barking. I was already imagining dogs barking. Now, for the rest of the story, part of me is anticipating a sound clip to illustrate every noun doing verb.
The other thing is I would have preferred the narrator to have been a survivor of the expedition, so that instead of being a very good reader of purplish horror, he would be dramatizing his own reactions. This goes back to the original Frankenstein, and Moby Dick, but I think it draws the audience in, with more "show", less 'tell".
There are some "tells" that Crevasse was not written to be an audio piece. If the story had been written with audio in mind, maybe "The dogs barked" problem could have been no problem.
Remember when Norm first started doing EP? The EP forums were ablaze with purists who hated his "audio embellishments" and intros. Chains were rattled. Since then, tho, lots of EP folks are familiar faces (well, avatars anyway) here.
I wonder if it's possible to conceive of a twabble made up of nothing but spliced sound clips, no narrator. Something like Trey Jackson's prize-winning Haiku about the knife-wielding murderer in the closet wondering when you will get home.
Rambling here. Thanks for the story! Looking forward to more collaboration amonst the braintrust.
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