Drabblecast 049 - Heart to Heart

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Drabblecast 049 - Heart to Heart

Post by Mr. Tweedy » Fri Feb 01, 2008 10:54 pm

Heart to Heart by Christopher Kastensmidt

"I just don't think I can date you anymore."
"What, Carl? What's the problem?"
"Well let me ask you a question first. What do you consider your job description as high priestess of Hurl?"

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Post by AynSavoy » Sun Feb 03, 2008 6:29 am

I enjoyed the shared narration; it worked really well with this piece. The story was entertaining, but I saw it coming a mile away, so the production saved this one for me.
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Post by hooloovoo33 » Sun Feb 03, 2008 7:55 pm

Yah, I didn't feel this was one of drabblecast's stronger stories. It wasn't bad! But I didn't enjoy it as much as most of the other ones. What a morbid drabble to start it off.....
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Post by normsherman » Sun Feb 03, 2008 11:51 pm

Morbid? I thought it was kindof sweet. :-)
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Post by G. E. Lee » Mon Feb 04, 2008 1:52 pm

I thought the feature story was pretty funny. It usualy brings a chuckle to see the conventions of the fantasy genre examined through the lens of real life common sense.
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Post by vburn » Mon Feb 04, 2008 11:41 pm

There are a lot of deaths in these 100 word drabbles!

The main story did nothing for me, just pasted the time. The production and voice acting were good. I think this is another example a of diolage driven story that fails the show don't tell rule.

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Post by Mr. Tweedy » Tue Feb 05, 2008 5:36 am

This story didn't do anything for me. It needed a twist, but there wasn't one. The joke plods along in a perfectly strait line to a punch-line that isn't very punchy.

If Carl the Brave discovered his girlfriend was really an evil sorceress responsible for the summoning of many monsters and the deaths of many heroes, would the heroic have been to lock her up in a magic amulet or something (that is, assuming he's the sort of unenlightened, chauvinistic hero who doesn't kill women)? Kind of an under-reaction, don't you think?

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"Well, then! If that's how it is, I'm leaving."
"Aw, come on, Jenny. Please stay."
"Sorry, Phil, being used for crockery is one thing this woman just doesn't put up with."
(Door slams.)
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Post by normsherman » Tue Feb 05, 2008 6:32 am

Well I guess I had a simpler take on it (keep in mind I don't yes or no these stories so I feel ok to give my real opinion on them!)
I wasn't looking for a twist personally, it didn't seem setup that way. It was just one of those "talks" you have when you know it isn't working out with someone, except juxtaposed onto a ridiculously standard "fantasy" context. I guess I just saw it as "cute" so I knew it would work best with a co-narration. I certainly used a lot of "quotes" in this post.
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Post by Mr. Tweedy » Tue Feb 05, 2008 6:52 am

Incidentally, I really liked the co-narration. I liked it in Jelly Park too. Your voices are always great, but multiple people makes it sound more like radio theatre, which I dig.
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Post by strawman » Tue Feb 05, 2008 2:02 pm

Tweedy,
Expand that dialogue a bit and I think you're on to something fun. Maybe introduce 3-4 similar couples and have Psychopath Marriage Counselling?

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Post by Philippa » Tue Feb 05, 2008 6:41 pm

Nice creepy drabble! I agree with Norm about Heart to Heart - although a twist would have perked it up a bit I found it a perfectly satifying sweet and amusing little tale of what might go on behind the closed doors of muscled barbarian heroes and beautiful demon-summoning sorceresses. Didn't you ever wonder what Thulsa Doom did on his days off?

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Post by Richmazzer » Tue Oct 07, 2008 2:56 am

Catching up on old episodes here. I thought this was a fun story.
I'm mostly interested to know where Norm got the bluegrass Star Wars music for the Drabblenews- awesome!

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Post by normsherman » Tue Oct 07, 2008 3:29 am

That's just a bit o pickin on ye old mandolin by yours truly.
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