The Betweeners

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The Betweeners

Post by delfedd » Thu Jul 10, 2008 6:56 pm

The Betweeners

In between every place, there is a space where something lurks. A bridge over a stream, the forests between the kingdoms. The Betweeners fed on fear and anger. But now those places are gone. The forests are mapped, the bridges are built meticulously. They're not between there anymore.

Recently, The betweeners found a new place. A great net between strange electric machines. The betweeners crawled out and into this new place. And oh what a feasting ground it is for fear and anger.

Perhaps it's appropriate that those who fear us most call us by our old name.

Trolls




Eh, I think this could be better. I wanted to get a "rising up" comment in there, but writing drabbles is hard. First one I've ever done, by the

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Post by guitardel » Thu Jul 10, 2008 11:43 pm

Hey, I liked it! Great concept for the story. Del.

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Post by cammoblammo » Fri Jul 11, 2008 2:50 am

That's one of the best drabbles I've seen in a looooong time. It's funny, but pointed in a non-cynical sort of a way.

Well done.

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Post by delfedd » Fri Jul 11, 2008 3:05 am

Oh, thanks. I just kinda, yknow... wrote it.

Heh.

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Post by Kevin Anderson » Sun Jul 20, 2008 11:38 pm

Very well done.
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Post by strawman » Thu Jul 24, 2008 11:37 pm

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Post by Mr. Tweedy » Fri Jul 25, 2008 3:54 am

Dude, you actually tied up a Barbie® doll and hung it over a pot... and turned the fire on... and took a picture of it... with the intention of putting that picture up on the internet where the whole world could see what you had done...

That is what I would call "hard core." Hard core what I'm not sure, but it's definitely at the extreme edge of something.
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