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To His Coy Mistress: A Love Poem

Posted: Sun Oct 17, 2010 1:59 am
by bell
An alien invasion won't make me run or scream,
I'll be the first to welcome them, of this I often dream.

I'll happily assist them when they fall from the sky,
Requiring the smartest men, such, for example, as I.

To run this world, after it's been destroyed and built anew,
I will need someone beautiful, such, for example, as you.

You'll only think of musclemen while reading “To Serve Man”,
You'll save your admiration for my long attention span,

Together we will travel the world while righting every wrong.
Oh aliens, dear aliens, what's taking you so long?

Re: To His Coy Mistress: A Love Poem

Posted: Tue Oct 19, 2010 4:42 pm
by bell
OK, I'll shamelessly bump this one up to the top, cause I don't think anyone actually saw this. Thank you for not throwing rotten cabbages at me.

Re: To His Coy Mistress: A Love Poem

Posted: Fri Oct 22, 2010 9:27 am
by Rish Outfield
Wow, that is a really unique drabble.

Was it harder to stick to a hundred words while making the lines rhyme, or could it possibly be easier?

Re: To His Coy Mistress: A Love Poem

Posted: Tue Nov 09, 2010 5:49 pm
by bell
The counting of words and the counting of syllables so the lines scan right are similar in nature; it's certainly not much harder.

Re: To His Coy Mistress: A Love Poem

Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 7:21 am
by mrsmica
Nice reference slipped in there. Had to look it up myself.
I wonder if that line would be better if it read "nutrients" instead of "muscleman"? I keep stumbling over that one word when I read through the drabble.

As to the rest, it's adorable. The heroic couplets have me mentally reading it in a sing-song voice.