We bring bad things to life

100 word stories. Post all you like, maybe we'll dip in and use yours?
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InfernoFudd
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We bring bad things to life

Post by InfernoFudd » Wed Jan 05, 2011 11:13 pm

I was but a boy when he was captain. We only called him Mister Electric. He told us to live forever, but I think he just wanted everyone dead.
Flashes of blue light came from under his front porch. I couldn’t help but want to know more. Peeking inside his basement were machines of unspeakable complexity and detail. Energies were shaking the ground. The stuff that was pulsing through your veins wasn’t blood, it was electricity.
Major, lieutenant colonel, colonel, on up through the ranks he went until his machines could reanimate life. Then he demanded we call him General.

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Re: We bring bad things to life

Post by zcarter80 » Thu Jan 06, 2011 12:53 am

All hail General Electric for without him our days are dark and we are powerless before him! Excellent piece dude. there was a part where the flow was a little interrupted but it came back on track nicely.
If I wrote it you can read it unless you sound like Fran Drescher.

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Re: We bring bad things to life

Post by Rish Outfield » Sun Jan 23, 2011 4:17 am

Yeah, I think you need to switch a "your" to "his" to clarify things a bit.

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