Eye--Heart--You

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Eye--Heart--You

Post by nevermore_66 » Sat Feb 12, 2011 8:38 am

Now this is the point.

You fancy him mad.

You mistake acute senses for illness. You tear up the planks, discover foul play. Two pieces remain missing. He never saw what slithered down the drain during dismemberment. You never saw what hatched from the ocular socket.

They join, now, beneath the floorboards—the pumping organ and vulture eye. They attach in egress—another mask abandoned—chaos crawling.

Listen. Harken. Like a watch enveloped in cotton. The beat that decrees insanity—all lucid thoughts to slay.

Do you not hear it?

Here! Here!

It is the beating of my hideous heart!
Boy meets girl.
Boy looses girl.
Boy gets girl back...
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Post by Mr. Tweedy » Sat Feb 12, 2011 11:56 pm

I keep wanting to "like" posts. Where's the "like" button?

I enjoy this because of how it mimic's Poe's style. It means nothing on its own, but it's a fun sequel.
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Post by ROU Killing Time » Sun Feb 13, 2011 4:19 am

eye heart this drabble too.
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Post by nevermore_66 » Mon Feb 14, 2011 3:18 pm

Thank you both!
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Boy looses girl.
Boy gets girl back...
...one piece at a time.
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Post by Phenopath » Thu Feb 17, 2011 9:04 pm

Excellent drabble, deserving of the full Rish treatment me-thinks (the voice in my head when I read this is definitely Rish's).
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Post by nevermore_66 » Wed Feb 23, 2011 6:12 pm

Appreciated. And this is certainly available to anyone that wants to give it the treatment.
Boy meets girl.
Boy looses girl.
Boy gets girl back...
...one piece at a time.
Strangeness in the Proportion
(Now with 20% more absinthe!)

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Re: Eye--Heart--You

Post by Rish Outfield » Sun Mar 06, 2011 4:00 am

Phenopath wrote:Excellent drabble, deserving of the full Rish treatment me-thinks (the voice in my head when I read this is definitely Rish's).
Which voice are you referring to? We have many.

I'm a huge fan of "Tell Tale Heart." In fact, I blew out a speaker once with my screaming of "Dissemble no more! Tis the beating of his hideous heart!"

Great drabble.

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Post by nevermore_66 » Sun Mar 06, 2011 4:09 am

Thanks!

I'm a big fan of that story too. I about wore out my CDs to Closed on Account of Rabies (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Closed_on_ ... _of_Rabies) with Iggy Pop's rendition of "The Tell-Tale Heart".

Boy meets girl.
Boy looses girl.
Boy gets girl back...
...one piece at a time.
Strangeness in the Proportion
(Now with 20% more absinthe!)

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