You are the Contoller

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CLP
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You are the Contoller

Post by CLP » Wed Jul 20, 2011 3:12 pm

“Son, I have a new videogame I want you to try.” Said Frank

“Huh? Oh, let me get to a save point.” Said Jimmy.

Frank led Jimmy out the front door. “Look.”

Jimmy rubbed his bloodshot eyes. “Turn down the brightness.”

“You’ll get used to it.”

“Where’s the controller?”

“You don’t need one. You are the controller.”

“Wow! The graphics are amazing! The physics engine is almost natural.” Jimmy stepped out in the grass. “It even feels real.”

Frank Smiled.

What’s the goal of this game?” Jimmy asked. “Who are the enemies?”

Frank handed him a rifle, “They all are.”
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Re: You are the Contoller

Post by noctem93 » Thu Jul 21, 2011 2:31 pm

As I was reading, I kept thinking "oh, how clever". I thought this was just going to be a morality play on unplugging and the sad state of the modern video game junkie. It wasn't until the last line, which I completely failed to see coming, that my "oh, how clever" turned into an "oh you cheeky bastard!"

What a dark and satisfyingly unexpected ending.

Great dialog. Great pacing. Great idea. Great twist.
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Re: You are the Contoller

Post by ROU Killing Time » Thu Jul 21, 2011 3:12 pm

Creepy. Great twist. Get your med checked. ;-)
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Re: You are the Contoller

Post by CLP » Thu Jul 21, 2011 4:08 pm

It was originally just going to be a dad trying to get his son to play out side, but i thought it needed more umph.

meds refilled! i knew i was forgetting something! i went to the pharmacy and could not for the life of me remember why i was there.
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Re: You are the Contoller

Post by strawman » Thu Jul 21, 2011 6:26 pm

Dodging bullets can be distracting.
Never judge anyone until you have biopsied their brain.

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