Buffalo Soldier

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Malstronikus
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Buffalo Soldier

Post by Malstronikus » Tue Aug 09, 2011 3:29 am

The buffalo beside him snorted fiercely, balancing a rifle precariously between its front hooves.

From their hastily dug trench they scanned the battle-scarred field, wondering if their enemy would attack again.

Wolves had secretly militarized last year and caught humanity unawares. As the pack won victories across the Great Planes, buffalo felt compelled to intervene.

His four-legged comrade-in-arms was staring meaningfully at a locket containing a picture of a pretty cow. His companion caught his eye and then looked away sheepishly.

A horn blast pierced the silence, followed by a cacophony of hooves and feet stomping as the charge began.

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Re: Buffalo Soldier

Post by tbaker2500 » Tue Aug 09, 2011 4:36 am

Nice. I like the story.

If I may offer a suggestion? I would reduce the number of time you say Buffalo. Use it once, and it will have greater impact.

"looked away sheepishly" was a great pun.
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Re: Buffalo Soldier

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Re: Buffalo Soldier

Post by tbaker2500 » Wed Aug 10, 2011 1:09 am

Yikes.
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Re: Buffalo Soldier

Post by strawman » Wed Aug 10, 2011 5:57 am

Stampede!
Never judge anyone until you have biopsied their brain.

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Re: Buffalo Soldier

Post by Blu_Tulip » Thu Aug 11, 2011 2:10 am

Liked the story! Was I the only one wondering how that buffalo was going to pull a trigger with hooves?
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Re: Buffalo Soldier

Post by bell » Thu Sep 15, 2011 4:35 am

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What would have been written.
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If they hadn't died first.

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