First ever FNH drabble

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First ever FNH drabble

Post by FNH » Sun Feb 01, 2009 10:12 pm

Soul
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The Soul is a tensile thing. A taught, highly strung thing. A thing of crystalline beauty that stretches from the body to the the heavens... or the other place. Mine leads to the other place.

I lost mine when it was plucked, it hummed with a note that spoke volumes and called my mind into obedience. A man can't deny his soul.

It was a woman of course that plucked my Soul, with a love that burned and that's what she did to me. She made me burn her. Doused with fuel, lit a match and FOOM, a flaming beauty.

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Post by tbaker2500 » Mon Feb 02, 2009 5:48 am

He hee.. not bad!

The jump to her on fire is a little abrupt. Smooth that out a bit and and you got a nice poetic drabble.
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