The Rarest of Prey.

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The Rarest of Prey.

Post by SgtCrispy » Mon Oct 03, 2011 6:55 pm

Jameson crouched hidden in the bushes, sweat pouring down his face. The bait that he placed was sure to attract something. He listened to the sounds of the forest, waiting for a rustle or crack that was out of place.

Peering through the slit in his hideaway, he caught a glimpse of a grayish figure inching toward the lure. Carefully eyeing the surroundings, it reached for the bait and the trap was sprung. Jameson rushed forward and leapt onto the struggling beast.

Jameson asked “What are you offering?”
“Twenty-thousand a year and no benefits!” it shouted.
“I’ll take it.”

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Re: The most rarest of prey.

Post by Melissa » Wed Oct 05, 2011 5:04 am

I really dig the idea, but am having a hard time getting past "most rarest." I feel like a jerk, but can't stop my teeth from clenching at the phrase.

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Re: The most rarest of prey.

Post by Rish Outfield » Mon Oct 10, 2011 12:25 am

Melissa wrote:I really dig the idea, but am having a hard time getting past "most rarest." I feel like a jerk, but can't stop my teeth from clenching at the phrase.
Aye, but it's better than "least rarest."

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Re: The Rarest of Prey.

Post by SgtCrispy » Mon Oct 10, 2011 7:07 pm

Yeah it is a bit eye twitching. Behold new title!

Hehe, or how about leastest rare.

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Re: The Rarest of Prey.

Post by ROU Killing Time » Wed Oct 12, 2011 6:32 pm

SgtCrispy wrote:Yeah it is a bit eye twitching. Behold new title!

Hehe, or how about leastest rare.
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Re: The Rarest of Prey.

Post by tbaker2500 » Thu Oct 13, 2011 3:27 pm

Ha ha, awesome! I came in here expecting to hear yet another lame human hunting story. Well set up, sir. Well set up.
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Re: The Rarest of Prey.

Post by Melissa » Fri Oct 14, 2011 7:13 am

New title ftw! Now, this pedant can unreservedly enjoy your story. :)

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Re: The Rarest of Prey.

Post by Scattercat » Sun Oct 16, 2011 12:03 pm

I think it could be funnier with a specific item/concept for the bait. What is it that attracts small, gray jobs?

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Post by strawman » Sun Oct 16, 2011 2:02 pm

Scattercat wrote:I think it could be funnier with a specific item/concept for the bait. What is it that attracts small, gray jobs?
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Re: The Rarest of Prey.

Post by Dolohov » Thu Oct 27, 2011 2:45 pm

I think it could be funnier with a specific item/concept for the bait. What is it that attracts small, gray jobs?
A perfectly-sharpened #2 pencil?

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Re: The Rarest of Prey.

Post by tbaker2500 » Thu Oct 27, 2011 3:43 pm

Dolohov wrote:
I think it could be funnier with a specific item/concept for the bait. What is it that attracts small, gray jobs?
A perfectly-sharpened #2 pencil?
Ooh, I never touch a #2 pencil. I mean, who wants a pencil made out of poo? (Sorry, one of my favorite lines out of Connor Choadsworth's Nandi Bear.)
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