Frugality Pays?

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Frugality Pays?

Post by Lone Mopper » Sat Feb 04, 2012 9:51 am

I noticed the throbbing the first night and it continued nightly for several more. I shrugged it off as part of the healing process and hoped it would end.

It wasn’t until I felt it warming up each night that I became concerned. I started to worry about the parlor I went to and gave some thought about the tarot card signs.

The fear kicked in after a few weeks when it appeared to me that it was getting bigger.

This morning I noticed a tentacle on my neck.

This is the last time I use Groupon for a tattoo.

Revised version:

I dismissed the throbbing I felt as part of the healing process and wasn’t overly concerned.

A week later, I swear it felt like it was moving.

I started thinking about the parlor I visited with the tarot card and palm reading signs on the wall. A sense of dread settled over me, my normal bad decision making process?

Real fear didn’t kick in until after a few weeks and it appeared in the mirror to be stretching, growing larger.

This morning I noticed a tentacle on my neck.

This is the last time I use Groupon for a tattoo.
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Re: Frugality Pays?

Post by strawman » Sat Feb 04, 2012 12:36 pm

Syntax and punctuation a little distracting. Worth a rewrite.
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Re: Frugality Pays?

Post by Dolohov » Sat Feb 04, 2012 3:51 pm

Now I'm definitely not using that Groupon for "quaint bed and breakfast in Innsmouth".

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Re: Frugality Pays?

Post by strawman » Sat Feb 04, 2012 8:17 pm

Much better.
Dolohov, if there were a B&B in Innsmouth, it would be booked year round with CthuluCon devotees.
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