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Pavor Nocturnus

Post by Loren Eaton » Fri Apr 13, 2012 1:25 pm

Your four-year-old has night terrors. They shake her, drench her in sweat.

Two nights ago, a shriek dragged you from the nightly argument with your wife. "The knife, daddy, no, no." You soothed her. Her eyes soon shut.

Last night, she cried, "Daddy, the hammer, not the hammer." Despite reassurances, fear lingered in her gaze.

Tonight, she simply screamed. A glance at your hands set her sobbing. Your wife rushed in, brusque, irritated. "What did you do? Shhh, sweetie, you're okay."

Rage curled your fingers into claws. "I didn't do anything," you say. And you haven't.

At least not yet.
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Re: Pavor Nocturnus

Post by strawman » Fri Apr 13, 2012 7:30 pm

Now THAT's creepy.
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Post by Loren Eaton » Fri Apr 13, 2012 8:32 pm

My little one has been having night terrors. But unlike the narrator of this piece, I get along with my wife. And I have no intention of putting any house tools to, er, splattery ends.
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Post by uncre8d1 » Mon Apr 16, 2012 12:24 pm

Oooh, creepy.
Happy to say that my kids have only awakened with a scream two or three times, and I hope I can never sympathize with you here :-)
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Post by Loren Eaton » Mon Apr 16, 2012 1:24 pm

It's really freaky when it happens. What's worse is that the little one is almost inconsolable afterward.
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Post by strawman » Mon Apr 16, 2012 10:33 pm

Loren Eaton wrote:It's really freaky when it happens. What's worse is that the little one is almost inconsolable afterward.
Well, I would think so. It can't be easy to see daddy do that to mommy.
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Post by Travelin Corpse Feet » Tue Apr 17, 2012 10:28 pm

This is marvelously complex for something so short. And, hoo-boy, I can relate to staying up late thanks to screaming kids with sleep issues.*














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Post by Loren Eaton » Wed Apr 18, 2012 1:51 am

Travelin Corpse Feet wrote:*((BTW, I am Freddy Kruger))
Then you don't need to have "rage curl your fingers into claws." It happens naturally!

P.S. Glad you liked it!
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Post by Scattercat » Thu Apr 19, 2012 1:08 pm

I think Freddy would be really happy and surprised if he could curl his fingers...

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Post by Loren Eaton » Thu Apr 19, 2012 1:24 pm

Or pick his nose.
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