Aversion Therapy

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Aversion Therapy

Post by Scattercat » Mon Jun 25, 2012 3:31 pm

The advertising copy had been persuasive. "Harness the brain's natural powers! Use empathy to control those cravings away!" And really, the procedure had worked. It hadn't hurt. A brief humming, a bit of dizziness, and it was done.

"Please," cried the cupcakes. "We've lost so many of our sisters."

"No, take me instead," said the cake. "I can survive another slice gone. Better I should suffer than another pastry be snuffed out."

"Oh," the pie whispered, "it hurts."

And so he sat, tears streaming down his cheeks, surrounded by pleading voices only he could hear.

Sobbing helplessly with every bite.

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Re: Aversion Therapy

Post by Rish Outfield » Fri Aug 31, 2012 3:38 am

Excellent.

And it hurts because it's true.

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Re: Aversion Therapy

Post by acpracht » Fri Aug 31, 2012 4:34 am

love it.
I have a question on it, though... Is it actually keeping him from overeating? While he is sobbing, it doesn't seem to actually be stopping him from eating junk food. Or am I overreading?
Is it only junk food? Does broccoli also plead for its life?

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Re: Aversion Therapy

Post by Rish Outfield » Fri Aug 31, 2012 6:51 am

My interpretation was that the therapy made him empathetic to the junk food, but he still can't help but want the food. He's still going to be fat, but now he'll be miserable too!

Kind of like that time Big Anklevich ate an entire wedding cake, crying and begging for forgiveness the whole time.

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Re: Aversion Therapy

Post by chemistryguy » Thu Sep 06, 2012 12:52 pm

Scattercat wrote:The advertising copy had been persuasive. "Harness the brain's natural powers! Use empathy to control those cravings away!" And really, the procedure had worked. It hadn't hurt. A brief humming, a bit of dizziness, and it was done.

"Please," cried the cupcakes. "We've lost so many of our sisters."

"No, take me instead," said the cake. "I can survive another slice gone. Better I should suffer than another pastry be snuffed out."

"Oh," the pie whispered, "it hurts."

And so he sat, tears streaming down his cheeks, surrounded by pleading voices only he could hear.

Sobbing helplessly with every bite.

I liked. It reminded me of an episode of "Tales from the Darkside".

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Re: Aversion Therapy

Post by PhineasQP » Sat Oct 27, 2012 9:47 pm

So great.
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Re: Aversion Therapy

Post by Scattercat » Sun Oct 28, 2012 7:52 am

And a great reading at the Dribblecast!

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Re: Aversion Therapy

Post by uncre8d1 » Thu Nov 01, 2012 2:10 am

really quite good.
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