Sleep Tight (holiday themed)

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Sleep Tight (holiday themed)

Post by Mikes » Wed Dec 12, 2012 3:26 am

'Twas the night before Christmas,
And throughout the house
Creature was stirring
Eating louse, mouse and spouse.
Nary a soul was safe
From tentacle’d grasps,
Pulling all from their beds
To scream their last gasp.
Naughty or nice,
Creature does not care,
It’s boys, girls and parents
Creature seeks to ensnare.
Bones fill its bellies
Allowing it to grow,
Oozing through windows
Into the snow.
Soon there’ll be blood
Flowing throughout the streets,
Yo-ho-hos there won’t be,
Instead; there’ll be meat.
Remember this, child,
As you slip into sleep:
Step from bed once more,
And your soul Creature will reap.
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Re: Sleep Tight (holiday themed)

Post by ROU Killing Time » Wed Dec 12, 2012 4:49 am

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Re: Sleep Tight (holiday themed)

Post by basilgodevenos » Wed Dec 12, 2012 3:14 pm

Awesome. Easy to hear this in Norm's voice in my head.
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Re: Sleep Tight (holiday themed)

Post by purplemur » Wed Dec 12, 2012 8:06 pm

basilgodevenos wrote:Awesome. Easy to hear this in Norm's voice in my head.
Agreed.

This is one of the better drabblepoems I've seen, sticking to meter (mostly) and rhyme scheme and following a coherent line of thought. Very disturbing and definitely one I'll be reading to my daughter when she's a bit older. :twisted:
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Re: Sleep Tight (holiday themed)

Post by Mikes » Wed Dec 12, 2012 11:05 pm

Thanks guys. I'd be lying if I said Norms' Creepy Voice(tm) wasn't going through my head as I wrote this.... but for some reason so was Samuel L Jackson's....
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Re: Sleep Tight (holiday themed)

Post by ROU Killing Time » Thu Dec 13, 2012 12:04 am

Try it with Bob Dylan's voice.
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Re: Sleep Tight (holiday themed)

Post by basilgodevenos » Thu Dec 13, 2012 6:40 pm

Mikes wrote:Thanks guys. I'd be lying if I said Norms' Creepy Voice(tm) wasn't going through my head as I wrote this.... but for some reason so was Samuel L Jackson's....
Needs more swearing.
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