The New Book of Revelations, I.i-iii

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The New Book of Revelations, I.i-iii

Post by TheBigBadG » Fri Mar 15, 2013 9:56 am

The gates were immense and swollen with rust. The lieutenant obliterated the locks and Dr Castella quickly retrieved the fragments, cooing in veneration. Something moved in the mist ahead. I nudged Strauss. Weapons raised, we took point as we breached the Gates of Heaven.

The moaning was reverence stitched to agony. I found the first on his knees. He cried, 'Judgement is upon us! Have mercy, our fathers.'

I stopped too suddenly for Strauss, who knocked me off balance. Hadn't he heard? On my knees I tried to understand: Heaven had people in it. They thought we were gods.

[Edited to minify a rogue capital]

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Re: The New Book of Revelations, I.i-iii

Post by DoctorBanzai » Sun Mar 17, 2013 12:08 am

Nice.

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Re: The New Book of Revelations, I.i-iii

Post by SeanT » Sun Mar 17, 2013 2:26 pm

Interesting, just a little hard to follow. So they got to haven and everyone thought they were Gods? Not sure why though. Still the concept is great.
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Re: The New Book of Revelations, I.i-iii

Post by TheBigBadG » Sun Mar 17, 2013 5:15 pm

DoctorBanzai - thank you!
SeanT - should we think someone is God just because of a divine zip code....? :twisted: I'll see if I can make it easier to follow too.

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