The First Wish

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The First Wish

Post by PhineasQP » Fri Apr 19, 2013 12:46 am

The impatient Genie glared. "Gimme a minute," said Roger, who was genre savvy enough to know that wishes often backfired.

Irresistible to women? He'd seen that go wrong in the stories.
Eternal life? He'd be alive when the sun burned out. And beyond.
Unbelievable wealth? Tempting, but even Roger knew that money doesn't buy happiness.

Happiness.

"Aha! I wish… to be always happy!"

"Easy enough" said the Genie, and he conked Roger on the melon with his bottle.

Roger now sits drooling in his chair at the Shady Acres rest home, blissfully unaware that he's got two more wishes coming.
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Re: The First Wish

Post by strawman » Fri Apr 19, 2013 1:27 am

Very nicely paced, with satisfying resolution. :)
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Re: The First Wish

Post by gunsofchekhovia » Fri Apr 19, 2013 2:20 am

You'd think we would have learned that all genies are sadistic and untrustworthy by now. I mean, really, power to completely ruin your life and absolutely no conceivable reason not to do so?

Very nice.

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Re: The First Wish

Post by Algernon Sydney is Dead » Fri Apr 19, 2013 12:15 pm

PhineasQP wrote:he conked Roger on the melon with his bottle.
This kind of magic system always amuses me. :)

I could swear I've read a variant of this, but can't place it.
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Re: The First Wish

Post by strawman » Fri Apr 19, 2013 3:52 pm

Algernon Sydney is Dead wrote: I could swear I've read a variant of this, but can't place it.
Bugs Bunny as genie w/ Elmer Fudd ring any bells?
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Re: The First Wish

Post by chemistryguy » Fri Apr 19, 2013 7:29 pm

Phineas, I like the cut of your jib.

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Re: The First Wish

Post by PhineasQP » Fri Apr 19, 2013 11:29 pm

Thanks for the kind words, gang. You kids are nifty.

Algernon Sydney is Dead wrote:I could swear I've read a variant of this, but can't place it.
Whenever I write something I like, there's always a nagging thought: If I thunk of it, someone else probably already has, too.
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