A Lucrative Mistake

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DoctorBanzai
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A Lucrative Mistake

Post by DoctorBanzai » Sun Jun 02, 2013 2:23 pm

Upon first seeing the error on the door, Jake Cointreau was pretty pissed off. Who was going to hire someone who couldn’t even spell the name of his business right? He saw his profits dwindle to nothing in his mind’s eye.

The painter refused to help, stating that Jake had written it that way and too bad.

On Wednesday, his first client had slowly slipped in. She was confused, frightened, and not sure how to behave. Still, she hired him.

Her father had been taken, shanghaied into service, and she needed help.

Jake Cointreau – Pirate Investigator had his first case.

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Re: A Lucrative Mistake

Post by strawman » Sun Jun 02, 2013 2:31 pm

Point well made. One quibble. The last line punctuation.
I'd prefer "Jake Cointreau, Pirate Investigator".
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Re: A Lucrative Mistake

Post by Varda » Sun Jun 02, 2013 4:09 pm

With a name like Jake Cointreau, he should really consider just becoming a pirate, because that would be awesome!
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Re: A Lucrative Mistake

Post by Flintknapper » Mon Jun 03, 2013 9:28 pm

Made me laugh. I would hire him!

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Re: A Lucrative Mistake

Post by mrsmica » Sat Jun 08, 2013 2:10 am

Hilarious. I would hire him, too!

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