Unrealistic Expectations (Ugly Duckling theme)

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Unrealistic Expectations (Ugly Duckling theme)

Post by gunsofchekhovia » Wed Aug 28, 2013 2:28 pm

I have a broad forehead, not a thick skull. When a mob chases me with torches and pitchforks, I get the hint. Savages!

Anyway, I like it better in my new town. Everyone seems friendly and unarmed. There is a grocery store I can walk to from my house, and I'm headed home to bake a cake for my neighbors.

What's this? An opportunity for a good deed! Yes, I'm very tall. I will get your kitty right down out of that tree.

That hurts, kitty! I'm helping you!

No, kitty! Don't run into traffic!

Little girl, wait!

Damn it.

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Re: Unrealistic Expectations (Relocation theme)

Post by strawman » Wed Aug 28, 2013 2:45 pm

No matter where you go, there you are. :(
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Re: Unrealistic Expectations (Relocation theme)

Post by Thomas Daulton » Wed Aug 28, 2013 5:51 pm

"Everyone seems friendly and unarmed" is a great turn of phrase!! I may have to steal that sometime!
"All that is gold does not glitter; not all those that wander are lost." --J.R.R. TOLKIEN

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Re: Unrealistic Expectations (Relocation theme)

Post by Flintknapper » Wed Aug 28, 2013 8:01 pm

Even the best of intentions can go awry. I liked it. Frankenstein trying to make friends and failing. I wish though that you had incorporated the classic phil hartmann frankenstien quote "Fire Bad!"

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Re: Unrealistic Expectations (Relocation theme)

Post by gunsofchekhovia » Wed Aug 28, 2013 8:24 pm

strawman, that's true. You can never escape yourself for long, which is especially bad when you're your own worst enemy.

Thomas, Thank you. I was particularly proud of that line myself.

Flintknapper, I hadn't considered it. I wanted to make the monster clearly intelligent, but not obviously articulate. I omitted quotation marks altogether so that it would be unclear whether he is communicating adequately with these strangers. I'm not entirely convinced that was the right choice, though.

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Re: Unrealistic Expectations (Relocation theme)

Post by MonsieurMoustache » Wed Aug 28, 2013 8:45 pm

One of my fave drabbles. My brain added sound effects without prompting.

Screech! Bang! Face palm.

Lovely.

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Re: Unrealistic Expectations (Relocation theme)

Post by Varda » Wed Aug 28, 2013 9:02 pm

Yup, I agree. This one's adorable (if that's the right word for it). :D
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Re: Unrealistic Expectations (Relocation theme)

Post by gunsofchekhovia » Thu Aug 29, 2013 4:31 am

Aww, thanks, everybody.

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Re: Unrealistic Expectations (The Outcast theme)

Post by gunsofchekhovia » Wed Jan 08, 2014 3:42 pm

Bump for Outcast theme.

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Re: Unrealistic Expectations (The Outcast theme)

Post by Varda » Wed Jan 08, 2014 6:23 pm

...And a fistbump for the kickass drabble. :D It's always nice revisiting old favorites, and of course rooting 'em on in the eternal drabble-derby.
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Re: Unrealistic Expectations (Ugly Duckling theme)

Post by gunsofchekhovia » Thu Jul 03, 2014 5:21 pm

Bump for Ugly Duckling theme.

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