Pushy

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DoctorBanzai
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Pushy

Post by DoctorBanzai » Wed Sep 04, 2013 2:36 pm

We stood by the railing, knee high metal held up by thick wooden legs, watching the sunset across the gorge. Below us, filled with shadows, the beauty of nature gaped up at the sky.

In choosing to take this trip, after several days of disagreement and argument over the destination, our dream of closing the ever widening rift between us had been achieved. We were closer at that moment than we had been in months.

I turned to her, resting my butt on the railing; holding her shoulders gently, staring into her dark eyes.

That was when she pushed me.

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Re: Pushy

Post by strawman » Wed Sep 04, 2013 2:46 pm

Didn't see that coming, did you?
Still, the romantic mood isn't right for resting your 'butt'.

Unless...
OK, resting your butt probably reminded her of all those times she begged you to get off your butt. The push is just one last Honey-Do for the road.
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Re: Pushy

Post by Flintknapper » Wed Sep 04, 2013 7:59 pm

resting my backside against instead of butt on? maybe I do not know.

I certainly did not see that coming. However, considering how much they obviously fought I should have. Who has wanted to push their spouse off a bridge to their death? Only thing that keeps me in line is that I would have to manage the rug rats by myself.... just kidding.

I liked the drabble.

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Re: Pushy

Post by Varda » Wed Sep 04, 2013 9:20 pm

How about "resting my rear"? You'll get bonus alliteration points, too.

Clever little story. I haven't seen something so well-titled since "Pop Quiz"!
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Re: Pushy

Post by strawman » Wed Sep 04, 2013 9:52 pm

With three clauses in a single sentence, each begun with resting, holding and staring, my guess is the narrator's companion is Miss Dorothea Grimsley, who would have been arguing with you all day because you wanted to go to the beach, and to push you off the beach would not produce the satisfying splat she desired.
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Re: Pushy

Post by gunsofchekhovia » Thu Sep 05, 2013 2:26 am

This drabble is fine. The scenery is fine. The trip was fine. Everything is fine.

Good stuff, Doc!

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