Not From Around Here (Ghost Stories theme, sort of)

100 word stories. Post all you like, maybe we'll dip in and use yours?
Post Reply
User avatar
gunsofchekhovia
Member
Posts: 376
Joined: Thu Apr 04, 2013 3:31 am
Location: Louisiana
Contact:

Not From Around Here (Ghost Stories theme, sort of)

Post by gunsofchekhovia » Tue Sep 10, 2013 4:16 am

The sun is rising on the horizon. Soon, it will be beating down on the beautiful green grass outside the farmhouse. Somewhere, there's a traffic jam. Somewhere, there's air so sickly gray you could taste it, but you wouldn't want to. Somewhere, people are shooting each other in the street. Not here.

Here, there are no big city problems. Here, at this moment, there is only a punctuated silence. Not like last night.

Here, now, the only sound is a slobbery Labrador retriever, gnawing and gulping and slurping, understandably ecstatic about being given the biggest bone he has ever seen.

User avatar
Varda
Connor Choadsworth Defender
Posts: 1383
Joined: Wed Apr 10, 2013 5:41 pm
Location: Athens, Georgia
Contact:

Re: Not From Around Here

Post by Varda » Tue Sep 10, 2013 10:54 am

Oh boy. This piece has some serious layers on it! Firstly, it's a lovely setting sketch. Secondly, I could be wrong, but I think there's an implication about that happy dog's bone and why "last night" wasn't so peaceful and quiet. This is one of those drabbles that wiggles its eyebrows in the direction the bodies are buried. :wink:
Medical Microfiction: Stories about Science

Drabblescout Badges:
Merits: Twabble Author (5), Drabble Author (4), DRIP Slave Volunteer (2), Whittling (1), Macaroni Crafts (2)
Demerits: Redd*t Rouser (2), Whittler's Mother (6)

User avatar
Flintknapper
Member
Posts: 240
Joined: Thu May 09, 2013 9:06 pm
Location: Jemez Springs, New Mexico

Re: Not From Around Here

Post by Flintknapper » Tue Sep 10, 2013 2:15 pm

yeah like varda, I got the vibe that while this appears to be a peaceful and happy setting, there is something more sinister underlying the calm. Good drabble though. It is open to interpretation.

User avatar
gunsofchekhovia
Member
Posts: 376
Joined: Thu Apr 04, 2013 3:31 am
Location: Louisiana
Contact:

Re: Not From Around Here

Post by gunsofchekhovia » Tue Sep 10, 2013 3:28 pm

Thanks. I was hoping it wasn't too subtle. I've had this image in my head for a couple of years now of a dog sitting around chewing on a suspiciously large bone. I kept trying to build a story around it but nothing I thought of felt right. Finally, last night, I decided it would work as a drabble, and as the epilogue to an untold horror story. I feel pretty confident that the subtlety of this scene is just as, if not more, important than whatever drama led up to it. I thought it could imply any number of possibilities, but I wasn't sure it would work that way for others.

User avatar
strawman
Member
Posts: 5966
Joined: Sat Oct 20, 2007 2:20 pm
Location: South Georgia

Re: Not From Around Here

Post by strawman » Tue Sep 10, 2013 4:50 pm

I've been biting my tongue on this one, to stifle the urge to suggest that, as a general rule, it isn't a good idea to feed your dog chicken bones.

Get, sorta, that :shock: effect.

:idea: Giant chicken> WTC?
Never judge anyone until you have biopsied their brain.

"Be kind, for everyone is fighting a hard battle."
Known Some Call Is Air Am
Spoiler:
Non sum qualis eram = "I am not who I will be"

User avatar
gunsofchekhovia
Member
Posts: 376
Joined: Thu Apr 04, 2013 3:31 am
Location: Louisiana
Contact:

Re: Not From Around Here

Post by gunsofchekhovia » Tue Sep 10, 2013 5:02 pm

Yes. A giant chicken, is what it was. Biggest damn chicken you ever done seen.

User avatar
Varda
Connor Choadsworth Defender
Posts: 1383
Joined: Wed Apr 10, 2013 5:41 pm
Location: Athens, Georgia
Contact:

Re: Not From Around Here

Post by Varda » Tue Sep 10, 2013 9:52 pm

gunsofchekhovia wrote:Yes. A giant chicken, is what it was. Biggest damn chicken you ever done seen.
I just hope it wasn't a chicken named Jesus! :mrgreen:
Medical Microfiction: Stories about Science

Drabblescout Badges:
Merits: Twabble Author (5), Drabble Author (4), DRIP Slave Volunteer (2), Whittling (1), Macaroni Crafts (2)
Demerits: Redd*t Rouser (2), Whittler's Mother (6)

User avatar
gunsofchekhovia
Member
Posts: 376
Joined: Thu Apr 04, 2013 3:31 am
Location: Louisiana
Contact:

Re: Not From Around Here (Ghost Stories theme, sort of)

Post by gunsofchekhovia » Thu Jul 03, 2014 5:24 pm

Bump for Ghost Stories theme... maybe.

Post Reply