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Not From Around Here (Ghost Stories theme, sort of)

Posted: Tue Sep 10, 2013 4:16 am
by gunsofchekhovia
The sun is rising on the horizon. Soon, it will be beating down on the beautiful green grass outside the farmhouse. Somewhere, there's a traffic jam. Somewhere, there's air so sickly gray you could taste it, but you wouldn't want to. Somewhere, people are shooting each other in the street. Not here.

Here, there are no big city problems. Here, at this moment, there is only a punctuated silence. Not like last night.

Here, now, the only sound is a slobbery Labrador retriever, gnawing and gulping and slurping, understandably ecstatic about being given the biggest bone he has ever seen.

Re: Not From Around Here

Posted: Tue Sep 10, 2013 10:54 am
by Varda
Oh boy. This piece has some serious layers on it! Firstly, it's a lovely setting sketch. Secondly, I could be wrong, but I think there's an implication about that happy dog's bone and why "last night" wasn't so peaceful and quiet. This is one of those drabbles that wiggles its eyebrows in the direction the bodies are buried. :wink:

Re: Not From Around Here

Posted: Tue Sep 10, 2013 2:15 pm
by Flintknapper
yeah like varda, I got the vibe that while this appears to be a peaceful and happy setting, there is something more sinister underlying the calm. Good drabble though. It is open to interpretation.

Re: Not From Around Here

Posted: Tue Sep 10, 2013 3:28 pm
by gunsofchekhovia
Thanks. I was hoping it wasn't too subtle. I've had this image in my head for a couple of years now of a dog sitting around chewing on a suspiciously large bone. I kept trying to build a story around it but nothing I thought of felt right. Finally, last night, I decided it would work as a drabble, and as the epilogue to an untold horror story. I feel pretty confident that the subtlety of this scene is just as, if not more, important than whatever drama led up to it. I thought it could imply any number of possibilities, but I wasn't sure it would work that way for others.

Re: Not From Around Here

Posted: Tue Sep 10, 2013 4:50 pm
by strawman
I've been biting my tongue on this one, to stifle the urge to suggest that, as a general rule, it isn't a good idea to feed your dog chicken bones.

Get, sorta, that :shock: effect.

:idea: Giant chicken> WTC?

Re: Not From Around Here

Posted: Tue Sep 10, 2013 5:02 pm
by gunsofchekhovia
Yes. A giant chicken, is what it was. Biggest damn chicken you ever done seen.

Re: Not From Around Here

Posted: Tue Sep 10, 2013 9:52 pm
by Varda
gunsofchekhovia wrote:Yes. A giant chicken, is what it was. Biggest damn chicken you ever done seen.
I just hope it wasn't a chicken named Jesus! :mrgreen:

Re: Not From Around Here (Ghost Stories theme, sort of)

Posted: Thu Jul 03, 2014 5:24 pm
by gunsofchekhovia
Bump for Ghost Stories theme... maybe.