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The Beginning of the End

Posted: Tue Sep 17, 2013 6:47 pm
by BagABones
With little thought I end everything. A push of a button. A slight smile that twisted across my face and bled into a grimace.
Inside the containment unit my subject was unaware. Unaware of the biological nightmare that now coursed through his veins. This man, my patient zero, was now a viral time bomb.
Another button press, an exit opens wide. He runs into the open, waiting and ultimately doomed world outside. The gun barrel slips into my mouth and I gag at the taste.
I consider watching the world die in bleeding, screaming agony.
Instead, I pull the trigger.




My first attempt. And my first post.

Re: The Beginning of the End

Posted: Tue Sep 17, 2013 7:01 pm
by Cwpants
This is the way the world ends
This is the way the world ends
This is the way the world ends
Not with a bang but with Captain Trips.

:) Very good first Drabble! I like your work.

Re: The Beginning of the End

Posted: Tue Sep 17, 2013 7:52 pm
by chemistryguy
♫ Baby can you dig your man
He's a righteous man
Baby can you dig your man
I'll see his like again
Baby can you dig your man? ♫

Sorry, couldn't help myself.

Re: The Beginning of the End

Posted: Tue Sep 17, 2013 7:55 pm
by Cwpants
chemistryguy wrote:♫ Baby can you dig your man
He's a righteous man
Baby can you dig your man
I'll see his like again
Baby can you dig your man? ♫

Sorry, couldn't help myself.
Love it! :))

Re: The Beginning of the End

Posted: Tue Sep 17, 2013 8:16 pm
by strawman
Second Pants. Nice drabble. I must say your character shows remarkable self-control, overcoming that strong megalomaniacal compulsion to stick around at least for the action to start. Like back in the the old days. (Now those megalomaniacs were real men.)

And yet, if the Bond movies and Vin Diesel have taught us anything at all, it is that the villain should kill first, then gloat later. What if, just as your man pulls the trigger, Patient Zero remembers he's left his keys back in the cell?

All your evil brains splattered on the floor, and the world goes whistling obliviously on... :cry:

Re: The Beginning of the End

Posted: Tue Sep 17, 2013 8:38 pm
by Varda
chemistryguy wrote:♫ Baby can you dig your man
He's a righteous man
Baby can you dig your man
I'll see his like again
Baby can you dig your man? ♫

Sorry, couldn't help myself.
My thoughts exactly, Chemistryguy!! :D

Welcome to the forums, BagABones, and thanks for sharing the great intro-drabble!

Re: The Beginning of the End

Posted: Fri Sep 20, 2013 7:09 am
by MonsieurMoustache
Welcome, welcome!

And what a great introduction! Can't wait to see more drabbles from you.

Re: The Beginning of the End

Posted: Fri Sep 20, 2013 5:44 pm
by gunsofchekhovia
strawman, I respectfully disagree. I think the narrator's suicide was the best way to avoid suffering the consequences of his actions. Perfectly cowardly, perfectly villainous. In other words, nailed it.

Welcome aboard, BagABones, and may well-written drabbles fill you until they burst out of your membranes onto the unsuspecting forum.