Day Tripper

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Day Tripper

Post by will write for beer » Fri Oct 18, 2013 1:33 am

He’d spent the past week working his way back to the city: traveling by day, hiding by night. The day still belonged to the living. The night, however, belonged to the plague.

Earlier that afternoon, the outskirts of the city had finally come into view. Although he knew he shouldn’t approach this close to sundown, he found himself moving forward, sliding from shadow to shadow.

It occurred to him that things once seen could not be unseen. Still, he had to know.

He soon learned there were things far worse than the plague. There were nails. And bone. And teeth.
"Yeah they're dead. They're all messed up."
-- Sheriff McClelland

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Re: Day Tripper

Post by Varda » Fri Oct 18, 2013 2:53 am

Excellent, nice and dramatic. I especially appreciate the short, punchy sentences at the end.
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Re: Day Tripper

Post by Cymraeg » Fri Oct 18, 2013 12:23 pm

will write for beer wrote:The night, however, belonged to the plague.
My favorite line. Good drabble!

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Re: Day Tripper

Post by will write for beer » Fri Oct 18, 2013 11:47 pm

grassyass. :twisted:
"Yeah they're dead. They're all messed up."
-- Sheriff McClelland

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Re: Day Tripper

Post by Scattercat » Sat Oct 19, 2013 4:34 am

After two years in the slushpile, I have an undying (Har!) hatred of zombies.

But I like this drabble.

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Re: Day Tripper

Post by will write for beer » Sat Oct 19, 2013 6:38 pm

Coming from you, scattercat, that means a lot. Thx! :D
"Yeah they're dead. They're all messed up."
-- Sheriff McClelland

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