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DrabbleRhyme

Posted: Fri Oct 18, 2013 3:48 am
by Sunner
A goal I have set,
I hope not to bore.
To write ten times ten,
No less, and no more.

In rhyme, this is tough,
In beats, twice as hard,
To do it right is,
A job for a bard.

In form such as this,
Can tall tales be told?
Can sweet love be shown?
Or hate, hard and cold?

To write short and tight,
Is hard and takes skill.
Don't think me a hack,
If some seems like fill.

Who first thought to write,
In words, ten times ten?
I would seek him out,
To stab with my pen.

Re: DrabbleRhyme

Posted: Fri Oct 18, 2013 11:01 am
by Varda
Whoa. This is the first drabble-poem I've ever seen that had perfect scansion. 8)

This deserves one of those slow claps that gradually accelerates into thunderous applause.

Re: DrabbleRhyme

Posted: Fri Oct 18, 2013 11:56 am
by strawman
Yepper, and not only the scan; it makes sense, and has a point!
Okay, slight demerit for that point being a ten by ten pen (a little Seussish),
but bonus points for not having a pun.

I'd say Sunner is frontrunner for the Drabble Poetry Corner Chalice of Glory award!

-O, what's that you say?
-Well, how much could it cost to make two of the damn things?
- Okay, Okay, then, take a damn picture of it and make that the award. Poetry's all about images, isn't it?

-Yes, you better damn well sign it, Norm.

Re: DrabbleRhyme

Posted: Fri Oct 18, 2013 7:42 pm
by Sunner
Thank you both!

Strawman- the Seussian comment is acknowledged but was sort of unavoidable. I had decided that I wanted to try to write something that was a precise mathematical representation of the 100-word limit. I settled on a fairly simple 5 quatrains of 5 words per line, 5x4x5. I hate to admit it but it actually did not occur to me until I started writing, that in order to keep the scansion correct, every word in the piece had to be monosyllabic. And of course, I was too stubborn to change my original design. So a poem that was written about 100-word drabbles, actually ended up, by necessity, having neither the word "hundred" or "drabble".

Re: DrabbleRhyme

Posted: Fri Oct 18, 2013 10:29 pm
by Flintknapper
cool.

It does have a bit of fill, but I can look past that. Having a rhyme come out to exactly 100 words is tough.