On My Birthday (2014 theme)

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Marmabean
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On My Birthday (2014 theme)

Post by Marmabean » Sun Dec 08, 2013 4:48 pm

I unwrapped myself, scales and feathers molting like a Grecian sphinx. You shivered, dropped your eyes. Trembled. I was naked now — smelled new, all fresh tissue, damp skin, hair — your greatest creation. You spliced me, renewed me, meat from a test tube. I think in English, but something’s wrong. Do you understand my voice? The snarl? The hiss?

It didn’t seem to matter. You moved toward me, still shaking, the skin of your sculptor’s arms covered in gooseflesh. We embraced just once, and when I saw that you didn’t, you couldn’t understand, I sunk my fangs into your neck.

Kisssss.

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Re: On My Birthday (2014 theme)

Post by Varda » Sun Dec 08, 2013 5:24 pm

This is just awesome. A true sci-fantasy-horror genre cross. I appreciate the carefully chosen language as well.

Very well done - a top-notch first drabble, Marmabean!
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Re: On My Birthday (2014 theme)

Post by strawman » Sun Dec 08, 2013 6:27 pm

Agreed. Marmabean's got drabble game.
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Re: On My Birthday (2014 theme)

Post by Marmabean » Sun Dec 08, 2013 7:31 pm

Thank you! I appreciate the compliments. It was a fun challenge.

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