Aliens Theme: Yesterday

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Aliens Theme: Yesterday

Post by Cwpants » Wed Mar 26, 2014 4:57 am

Yesterday,
the other me
reached out across the cosmos.
My galactic twin
glistened in the moonlight
as stardust settled
on her skin and hair.
In her eyes
I glimpsed supernovas,
stellar nebulae, and galaxies.
Upon my front step,
my celestial sister sighed,
and from her lips
a song of the beginning
of time and space sprang forth.
She collapsed before me
and began to melt.
I, frantic to rescue
my space-faring counterpart,
knelt to cradle her in my arms.
An ice cold shock
traveled from my head
down to my sole
as skin touched skin
and she melted into me.
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Re: Aliens Theme: Yesterday

Post by jeetkuneluke » Fri Mar 28, 2014 3:43 pm

Very pretty. Great imagery. I dig it.

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Re: Aliens Theme: Yesterday

Post by Cwpants » Fri Mar 28, 2014 4:35 pm

Thanks, jeetkuneluke!

I updated it a bit to get rid of a redundant line :)
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Post by jeetkuneluke » Fri Mar 28, 2014 7:20 pm

Nice. :-)

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Re: Aliens Theme: Yesterday

Post by Thomas Daulton » Sat Mar 29, 2014 12:37 am

I haven't read Cwpants writing before, I'm a longtime listener, but only sporadic Forum participant. This poem was nicely written and fun to read. I've often wondered if my true love is waiting for me out there on Achernar VIII. And then the image of love dissolving into unity makes a great conclusion. Thanks for posting it!
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Re: Aliens Theme: Yesterday

Post by Cwpants » Mon Mar 31, 2014 5:02 am

Thanks for reading it, Thomas! I sincerely hope the person you are destined for is in this solar system :)
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Re: Aliens Theme: Yesterday

Post by strawman » Mon Mar 31, 2014 5:25 pm

Cwpants wrote:Thanks for reading it, Thomas! I sincerely hope the person you are destined for is in this solar system :)
Much more interesting if otherwise. Def keep us posted.
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