Stepping Through

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Stepping Through

Post by JoshPeters » Thu Jul 31, 2014 11:45 pm

The full moon shone on a vine covered doorway standing atop a cliff. The vines swayed in the breeze as a young man pulled himself up then leaned over and lifted his companion.

Together they removed the vines, revealing glowing glyphs and a keyhole. The dark wood of the ancient door absorbed the moonlight.

Jose lifted a chain from around his neck to reveal a silver key. He and Kat locked eyes.

"Are you sure you want to do this?"

Kat laughed.

"Do you think I would change my mind now?"

Together they turned the key and opened the door.

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Re: Stepping Through

Post by SpareInch » Fri Aug 01, 2014 5:03 am

Oooooo!

Reminds me of Prof Chronotis's apartment in Douglas Adams's 'Dirk Gently's Holistic Detective Agency'

WANT SEQUEL NOW! :cry:
The truth may be out there, but lies are inside your head.

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Re: Stepping Through

Post by JoshPeters » Fri Aug 01, 2014 5:05 am

It's been a long time since I read that, perhaps it's time for a refresher...

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Re: Stepping Through

Post by Caustic Reverie » Mon Sep 22, 2014 8:42 pm

That's a nice mood you've captured. Very cool.

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Re: Stepping Through

Post by Horrorshow » Mon Sep 22, 2014 9:14 pm

Caustic Reverie wrote:That's a nice mood you've captured. Very cool.
I quite agree. This has really whetted my appetite for more please, Josh.

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Re: Stepping Through

Post by Chairman Goodchild » Tue Sep 23, 2014 11:56 am

That is a very nice story that you've written, and i really enjoyed it.

My only criticism is that you used 'vines' three times, and that gets repetitive. If you merged the first two occurrences of the word, I think it would improve the story's structure.

As I said, it was a fun story.

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