Door Ajar

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Penman Bland
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Door Ajar

Post by Penman Bland » Fri Sep 05, 2014 7:15 pm

But first, the context-- earlier today, this showed up on a friend's Facebook:
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...and of course my immediate response was, "Really? A 'normal' Writer Brain, maybe." I then stuck an abnormal Writer Brain's response in as a comment, which I've polished it into the following unimposing Drabble.

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At 2:43, according to the clock that provided the only light in the adjacent kitchen, the deadbolt slipped silently back and without the knob ever turning at all, the door communicating to the garage yawned wide.

The deeper darkness of the garage listened to the tickings of the settling house, offering clicks and pings which may have been the cooling of a car. Just before dawn, the door swung closed, but it did not quite latch. Even if someone had been awake and watching, they would not have seen anything enter the house, nor would they have seen it leave.
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Re: Door Ajar

Post by Horrorshow » Sat Sep 06, 2014 12:30 pm

Nicely done, Penman.

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Re: Door Ajar

Post by Chairman Goodchild » Sat Sep 06, 2014 2:08 pm

Yes, I like this one.

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Re: Door Ajar

Post by pondspider » Thu Oct 02, 2014 10:45 pm

(as I'm a recent newb, I'm working my way through some of the back-Drabbles)

I like this. The description of the nighttime sounds. The underplayed spookiness. More please :)

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Re: Door Ajar

Post by strawman » Fri Oct 03, 2014 2:32 am

So is it a door
Or ajar?
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Re: Door Ajar

Post by ROU Killing Time » Fri Oct 03, 2014 6:46 am

strawman wrote:So is it a door
Or ajar?
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