Eternal Gardens of Living Teeth

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Eternal Gardens of Living Teeth

Post by unseentangerine » Wed Sep 24, 2014 8:59 am

This is a response to Everyone know it's your Parents by MonsieurMoustache

Around his neck is a gruesome wreath; unfolding his robes spill tinkling teeth.
Black bog ground and a creeping newt, in necrotic gardens the teeth take root.
As the Ferryman floats between his banks, one by one the dead join their ranks.
A misty morning, clouds in the sky. Without warning Charon walks by.
Castings his shadow, swinging his scythe, he holds out his hand to gather his tithe.
A man too poor to pay his toll, will give all he has to save his soul.
Piercing, unseen eyes choose one row; he exacts his price in one smashing blow.
Many on the forum have asked me, so here's my answer: a spoonful of lighter fluid. And you'll need to wash it out really well when you're done.

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Re: Eternal Gardens of Living Teeth

Post by MonsieurMoustache » Thu Sep 25, 2014 2:26 am

That was genuinely chilling! Thanks for responding to that challenge. I love this idea of a garden of teeth, although my question only grows more urgent - what does he do with the teeth now that he's got a crop of them? For another time, I'm sure, because the mystery is proving a very enjoyable source of drabbles.

Great work, Tangerine.

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Re: Eternal Gardens of Living Teeth

Post by Penman Bland » Fri Sep 26, 2014 10:14 pm

Well, I was going to have a try. I think I'm better off having a lie-down instead.

...with knees drawn up under chin, whimpering just audibly.
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Re: Eternal Gardens of Living Teeth

Post by unseentangerine » Sat Sep 27, 2014 2:21 am

Penman Bland wrote:Well, I was going to have a try. I think I'm better off having a lie-down instead.

...with knees drawn up under chin, whimpering just audibly.
Don't do that! How can anyone become a better writer without keeping on writing!? What if, to make it easier, we all promise to take into consideration your Canadianship when we review your work? :wink: And maybe you should know too, if you don't already, I totally ripped off the Black Sabbath song. I think you should rip off whoever you need too to make a better story than mine.
Many on the forum have asked me, so here's my answer: a spoonful of lighter fluid. And you'll need to wash it out really well when you're done.

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Re: Eternal Gardens of Living Teeth

Post by Horrorshow » Sun Sep 28, 2014 11:15 am

Really, really enjoyed this one, unseentangerine. Excellent stuff.

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Re: Eternal Gardens of Living Teeth

Post by Caustic Reverie » Mon Sep 29, 2014 11:08 pm

I love the imagery in this one. Smashing drabble!

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