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Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Mon Sep 29, 2014 12:01 am
by PB&Jellyphish320
The fools had won. Halloween, in America, was dead. No children disguised as monsters. No treats in exchange for mercy. No homage to the Dark Gods.
Everyone had forgotten the promises of their ancestors – everyone but the ancients to whom the pact was made.
So few understood those darkening clouds that seem to form at the roots of our long ignored wilderness. They didn’t read the meanings of the stars behind those crimson skies. They didn’t care to voice their beliefs when their children began to go missing. They didn’t know whom to blame when childhood nightmares came to life.

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Mon Sep 29, 2014 1:03 pm
by Chairman Goodchild
Oh, this one is nice.

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Mon Sep 29, 2014 2:50 pm
by unreliable narrator
Nice work. Very atmospheric!

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Mon Sep 29, 2014 7:01 pm
by Penman Bland
I thought these were meant to be fictional.

;)

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Mon Sep 29, 2014 8:56 pm
by PB&Jellyphish320
Thanks everybody! I'm happy you liked it! and Penman Bland: This is a warning to all living mortals . . . . ;)

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Mon Sep 29, 2014 11:04 pm
by tibbi
That was brilliant. Reminded me a little of "Cabin In The Woods". :)

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Fri Oct 03, 2014 11:37 pm
by tibbi
Well, I enjoyed this one so much I just had to produce it for the dribblecast. I trust no one will mind. I even tried out adding some creepy music as background.

http://www.dribblecast.org/2014/10/03/d ... n-promise/

Again, I hope it pleases.

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 11:11 am
by pondspider
I felt transported. This could be the script for a movie trailer. I hope you've secured the rights :)

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 12:27 pm
by bounceswoosh
Honest question: is "whom to blame" grammatically correct?

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 12:34 pm
by pondspider
bounceswoosh wrote:Honest question: is "whom to blame" grammatically correct?
I'd say "who", but what do I know?? :roll:

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 12:47 pm
by SpareInch
bounceswoosh wrote:Honest question: is "whom to blame" grammatically correct?

Umm... Yes, technically. But common usage allows for who if you feel happier saying that.

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 1:47 pm
by PB&Jellyphish320
tibbi wrote:Well, I enjoyed this one so much I just had to produce it for the dribblecast. I trust no one will mind. I even tried out adding some creepy music as background.

http://www.dribblecast.org/2014/10/03/d ... n-promise/

Again, I hope it pleases.

Wow! That actually just made my day :D Happy you like it so much!

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 2:14 pm
by strawman
SpareInch wrote:
bounceswoosh wrote:Honest question: is "whom to blame" grammatically correct?

Umm... Yes, technically. But common usage allows for who if you feel happier saying that.
And THAT's what's wrong with the world today: the acceptance of 'common usage'. Like saying "Lots of people are killing people, so it's not really against the law."

Miss Dorothea Grimsley says "Whom to blame" is not only correct, but mandatory. And she will fail your sorry ass right out of elementary school if you ever mention common usage again, except in writing dialogue in a story in which the speaker smokes, has a scar on their face, wears a black hat, and has an accent like Eliza Doolittle.

That said, I may be wrong.

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 2:59 pm
by pondspider
Steven Pinker's new book, The Sense of Style, The Thinking Person's Guide to Writing in the 21st Century has something to say on the who-whom question.
In 2000 the comic strip Mother Goose and Grimm showed an owl in a tree calling "Whom" and a raccoon on the ground replying "Show-off!".
and
The popularity of whom humor tells us two things about the distinction between who and whom. First, whom has long been perceived as formal verging on pompous. Second, the rules for its proper use are obscure to many speakers, tempting them to drop whom into their speech whenever they want to sound posh.
and
Shakespeare and his contemporaries frequently used who where the rules would call for whom and vice versa, and even after a century of nagging by prescriptive grammarians the who-whom distinction remains tenuous in speech and informal writing. Only the stuffiest prig would use whom to begin a short question or relative clause:
Whom are you going to believe, me or your own eyes?
It's not what you know, it's whom you know.
Do you know whom you're talking to?
:P

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 4:10 pm
by tibbi
I love the use of Whom over Who. If I'd said Who, I'd have felt I needed to tack a Doctor in front of it. :)
Not that I'm overly strict about grammar myself.


I'm glad the author approves of the production. :D

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 4:40 pm
by strawman
Dorothea Grimsley pointed out that Shakespeare is irrelevant, since the 30 Year War, in which the issue was finally settled, had yet to be fought.
However. she is abashed and kerfuffelled at the prospect of disagreeing with an Englishperson about English (after all they ARE English - res ipse loquitor).

- I reminded her that Latin trumps 'whom' for show-off.

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 5:30 pm
by pondspider
strawman wrote:Dorothea Grimsley pointed out that Shakespeare is irrelevant, since the 30 Year War, in which the issue was finally settled, had yet to be fought.
However. she is abashed and kerfuffelled at the prospect of disagreeing with an Englishperson about English (after all they ARE English - res ipse loquitor).

- I reminded her that Latin trumps 'whom' for show-off.
OK smartass... who the **** is/was (or will be?) Dorothea Grimsley? I'm confused :roll:

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Sun Oct 05, 2014 1:21 am
by PB&Jellyphish320
tibbi wrote:I love the use of Whom over Who. If I'd said Who, I'd have felt I needed to tack a Doctor in front of it. :)
Not that I'm overly strict about grammar myself.


I'm glad the author approves of the production. :D

You've got me giggling over here. Honestly, I used "who" originally, but the little green squiggles on Word told me I was wrong so i changed it and liked "whom" better . . . sounds more sinister don't you think?

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Sun Oct 05, 2014 1:25 am
by strawman
Miss Grimsley was an old sockpuppet Drabblecast grammarian whose spirit was conjured up originally by ROU Killing Time's overuse and abuse of gerunds. A previous moderator, who long since retired to spend some time reacquainting himself with his family, banned sock puppets from the forums, and so Grimsley had to forego her dominatrix designs on ROU and submit to banishment.

If you do a search, you will find that a not-insignificant portion of DC's many thousands of posts involved her. And ROU's unrequited passion has left a hole in his heart. He cannot look at a gerund without flashbacks.

And now, Grimsley has apparently been replaced by Microsoft squiggles. They just don't go the same with latex.

Re: Broken Promise (Halloween)

Posted: Sun Oct 05, 2014 8:13 am
by SpareInch
strawman wrote:However. she is abashed and kerfuffelled at the prospect of disagreeing with an Englishperson about English
Performing the impossible, and going off at a tangent to a tangent, I just want to say that you reminded me there of something British celebrity chef Rick Stein once said.

He mentioned that his Italian and american friends were always picking him up on his pronunciation of the word Oregano.

We Brits say the first E as an I, and it seems that everyone else pronounces it as a hard E.

Steins verdict was, "Who's bloody language am I speaking anyway?"