The Door

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The Door

Postby Lucy Jayne » Fri Oct 10, 2014 2:15 pm

Large iron hinges hold the door as it moves effortlessly. The ornate handle no longer displays the gold coloured coating that once adorned it; endless hands wore that away a long time ago.

Occasionally a queue forms.

Humans wait patiently for their turn to take hold of the handle, the lack of light on the other side unnoticed. Standing in line they avoid eye contact, not wanting to admit why they are there. Individuals hurry through, regret carved onto their faces.

The handle on the other side of the door remains untouched, those who pass into the darkness cannot return.


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Thought I'd have a go at a drabble and hopefully I've posted it correctly in the correct place (give me a gentle poke if I haven't)

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Re: The Door

Postby SpareInch » Fri Oct 10, 2014 3:59 pm

So it's like a cross between the M.O.M employees entrance from Harry Potter, and that door in Lord Vetinari's office in Discworld which sometimes has a pitfall on the other side and sometimes not?

No... No... On second reading, it's the door to the underworld.

Or possibly the headmaster's office, which was much the same thing when I was at school.
The truth may be out there, but lies are inside your head.

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Re: The Door

Postby pondspider » Fri Oct 10, 2014 4:46 pm

Nice one. I was half expecting a little toilet humour at the end :)

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Re: The Door

Postby pondspider » Fri Oct 10, 2014 4:49 pm

SpareInch wrote:Or possibly the headmaster's office, which was much the same thing when I was at school.

Life in Tynedale were 'ard when I were a lad. By 'eck.
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Re: The Door

Postby ROU Killing Time » Fri Oct 10, 2014 11:45 pm

I got "Dante" right off the bat.

Nice job on a first Drabble.
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Re: The Door

Postby Horrorshow » Sat Oct 11, 2014 12:19 pm

I wouldn't encourage too many of the members here to give me a gentle poke but this is a very good debut drabble, Lucy Jayne. Welcome.

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Re: The Door

Postby unreliable narrator » Sat Oct 11, 2014 1:36 pm

Nicely mysterious story. Good job! Welcome aboard. :D
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Re: The Door

Postby Lucy Jayne » Mon Oct 13, 2014 12:04 am

Thank you for the comments, it's lovely to meet you all :D

I will be adding more drabbles (I need a title for the latest one first) as they are fun to write, I hadn't though of the toilet idea but you are right it could have been that and it did make me laugh :wink:

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Re: The Door

Postby pondspider » Mon Oct 13, 2014 1:18 am

Lucy Jayne wrote:Thank you for the comments, it's lovely to meet you all :D

I will be adding more drabbles (I need a title for the latest one first) as they are fun to write, I hadn't though of the toilet idea but you are right it could have been that and it did make me laugh :wink:

Quite addictive, in a good way. ;)

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Re: The Door

Postby MonsieurMoustache » Mon Oct 13, 2014 6:47 am

Ooo, I really like this one. The imagery is tantalizingly dark.


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