Grief is a Winding Road; Regret, an Endless Labyrinth

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Grief is a Winding Road; Regret, an Endless Labyrinth

Postby normsherman » Sun Nov 02, 2014 6:34 pm

Of all the ghosts that endlessly chase him, it is theirs alone he cannot turn to face.

It’s been almost 13 years now since the tragedy that took his wife and 8-year old daughter, and while Pacman hadn’t been home the night the gas stove caught fire, he imagines it all as if he had been. He imagines their screams drowning out in flame and he imagines their baleful disembodied eyes watching him-- his infidelity-- from the dark corner of a strange woman’s room.

Pacman swallows another handful of yellow pills, and chases them down with a pineapple.
"Give us all some Jelly"

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Re: Grief is a Winding Road; Regret, an Endless Labyrinth

Postby ROU Killing Time » Sun Nov 02, 2014 10:42 pm

Wokka Wokka Wokka... Nyu nyu nyu nyu nyuuuuu!

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Postby ROU Killing Time » Sun Nov 02, 2014 10:48 pm

I'd change one line (the first "imagines") to "he hears their screams" to avoid the double imagine use.
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Re: Grief is a Winding Road; Regret, an Endless Labyrinth

Postby unseentangerine » Mon Nov 03, 2014 2:12 am

ROU Killing Time wrote:I'd change one line (the first "imagines") to "he hears their screams" to avoid the double imagine use.

That's a 103 word drabble. I think that he really meant to convey a continuation of one thought across two sentences. In which case the use of two of the same word is most appropriate.
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Re: Grief is a Winding Road; Regret, an Endless Labyrinth

Postby ROU Killing Time » Mon Nov 03, 2014 6:54 am

unseentangerine wrote:
ROU Killing Time wrote:I'd change one line (the first "imagines") to "he hears their screams" to avoid the double imagine use.

That's a 103 word drabble. I think that he really meant to convey a continuation of one thought across two sentences. In which case the use of two of the same word is most appropriate.

Oh I quite agree it's allowable, although personally, when I only have 100 words to work with, I have a tendency to try and use as many unique words as possible. ;-)
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Postby normsherman » Tue Nov 04, 2014 4:35 am

unseentangerine wrote: I think that he really meant to convey a continuation of one thought across two sentences. In which case the use of two of the same word is most appropriate.


Haha, yah that was the idea (going by the ol "3 times and it's intentional" doctrine'). Intensity through repetition or whatever.

Had a weird dream about catching Inky and Blinky's disembodied eyes watching you before fleeing into the darkness back to base and decided that was probably the creepiest part to the whole Pacman mythos.
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Postby ROU Killing Time » Tue Nov 04, 2014 4:59 am

nyu.nyu,nyu,nyu...

please insert another quarter... :)
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Postby AbbawithanI » Fri Nov 07, 2014 8:18 pm

Drowning himself in bad fruit cocktails, no doubt, whose cherry syrupyness has soured over these many quartered years. Love it!

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Re: Grief is a Winding Road; Regret, an Endless Labyrinth

Postby MonsieurMoustache » Tue Nov 11, 2014 3:06 am

Well, there was a game concept I didn't think was all that weird until Norm Sherman found a way for it to make sense. It's great to have you posting here, Norm, I love your drabble work.

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Postby pondspider » Tue Nov 11, 2014 6:27 pm

MonsieurMoustache wrote:... It's great to have you posting here, Norm, I love your drabble work.

Yeah... Welcome to the forum, Norm :P

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Postby strawman » Tue Nov 11, 2014 10:13 pm

He used to hang out here a lot.
But it came down to producing the stories or not.
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Re: Grief is a Winding Road; Regret, an Endless Labyrinth

Postby Chairman Goodchild » Wed Nov 12, 2014 10:16 am

Pills will chase away the ghosts, but only for awhile. They always come back, harder and stronger than ever before. Then you run out of pills, and you can't get anymore, and those ghosts are right behind you, breathing down your neck. They're all you think about.

Then, finally, finally you can get more pills. You just tease yourself with them, you don't want to pop them too fast, because as much as you need them, you have to pace yourself or you'll run out again. Then you find yourself propped up against a wall somewhere, just staring at one until you can't help yourself anymore. Then you take it, and that rush just kicks in, it's like you're invincible.

But here's the thing: those pills don't work so well anymore. You keep on taking them, and they keep on working less and less. Then, one day, they don't work at all. But you can't stop taking them.

If it sounds like I know what I'm talking about, I do. And in the end, what do I have to show for it?





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Re: Grief is a Winding Road; Regret, an Endless Labyrinth

Postby strawman » Wed Nov 12, 2014 5:37 pm

Player channeling inner lab rat.
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