Something in the Storm

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metalcapatiller
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Something in the Storm

Postby metalcapatiller » Tue Nov 04, 2014 10:45 pm

Pink lightning flickered across the darkening purple sky. As the rain began to fall, everything muted into a uniform shade of gray. The only sound is that of the raging storm.
Everyone sane is indoors right now. That probably explains why I'm still out here, alone, calling to the sky hoping that something, anything, will answer.
Looming towards me in the darkness is a shape that refuses to make up its mind. Terror slowly begins to creep over me. As another bolt of lightning strikes nearby, I hear a deep and smooth voice say, "You should have been more specific."
CAPITAL letters are always the best way of dealing with things you don't have an answer to - Douglas Adams

Why is it that whenever I get "It's a Small World" stuck in my head, I need to sing it loudly and off-key?

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Re: Something in the Storm

Postby metalcapatiller » Fri Nov 14, 2014 2:54 am

Should I change the last line?
CAPITAL letters are always the best way of dealing with things you don't have an answer to - Douglas Adams

Why is it that whenever I get "It's a Small World" stuck in my head, I need to sing it loudly and off-key?

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Re: Something in the Storm

Postby strawman » Fri Nov 14, 2014 4:09 am

The last line is kinda necessary. It's the previous sentence, "deep and smooth" that needs to convey why "you should have been more specific".
The image that comes to mind is Barry White.
Is that what you intended?
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Re: Something in the Storm

Postby metalcapatiller » Fri Nov 14, 2014 4:27 am

No, I was going for more of a "Tim Curry devil from Legend"
CAPITAL letters are always the best way of dealing with things you don't have an answer to - Douglas Adams

Why is it that whenever I get "It's a Small World" stuck in my head, I need to sing it loudly and off-key?

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Re: Something in the Storm

Postby strawman » Fri Nov 14, 2014 12:13 pm

Tim Curry, Barry White... sounds like a generational issue.
Never judge anyone until you have biopsied their brain.

"Be kind, for everyone is fighting a hard battle."
Known Some Call Is Air Am
Spoiler:
Non sum qualis eram = "I am not who I will be"

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Re: Something in the Storm

Postby pondspider » Fri Nov 14, 2014 1:33 pm

strawman wrote:Tim Curry, Barry White... sounds like a generational issue.

Hmmm. That's quite a difference. Can't imagine Tim Curry attracting quite the same following as Big Barry. :D

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Re: Something in the Storm

Postby strawman » Fri Nov 14, 2014 9:45 pm

Didn't see Rocky Horror. The generational issue is with me.
Never judge anyone until you have biopsied their brain.

"Be kind, for everyone is fighting a hard battle."
Known Some Call Is Air Am
Spoiler:
Non sum qualis eram = "I am not who I will be"


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