Raymond

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Post by KateZiervogel » Sat Nov 22, 2014 7:27 pm

With a deft and expert thumb he flipped the lid off the top with a plopping sound. It came to rest upside down, against the hairy neck of its owner. Now exposed to the elements, the gelatinous pudding became time-sensitive.

Scooping with one hand, Raymond rested the other hand lovingly on the shoulder, now slightly damp. But he didn’t seem to notice and continued to scoop and slosh the soft contents into a beautifully etched glass dessert bowl decorated with fine flowers and delicate Victorian patterns.

“Some might say this is more than you deserve you know.” He thought.

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Re: Raymond

Post by Algernon Sydney is Dead » Sun Nov 23, 2014 12:10 am

Welcome aboard, KateZiervogel!

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Re: Raymond

Post by KateZiervogel » Sun Nov 23, 2014 5:49 am

Thank you for the welcome. I wasn't sure about just jumping in so I did what any good writer would.... Jump right in lol. I am looking forward to being a part of this exciting forum and learning a lot.

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Re: Raymond

Post by strawman » Sun Nov 23, 2014 12:40 pm

Welcome indeed to our first Afrikkaner forumite. And a good first post, Increasing cringe inducement as one realizes what's happening, but the final line is obscure enough to draw the reader to edge close enough to peak inside your imagination.
More than who deserves to know? Victim or reader? Or *looking over shoulder* are they one and the same?

Not bad for 100 wrords.
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Re: Raymond

Post by KateZiervogel » Sun Nov 23, 2014 1:01 pm

Thanks strawman. Lol

Just one thing, I'm not an Afrikaaner. Just your garden variety English speaking South African. Yip. Lol

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Re: Raymond

Post by strawman » Sun Nov 23, 2014 1:56 pm

Surnames can be misleading. But still, as DC's first garden variety English speaking South African, no less welcome!
Never judge anyone until you have biopsied their brain.

"Be kind, for everyone is fighting a hard battle."
Known Some Call Is Air Am
Spoiler:
Non sum qualis eram = "I am not who I will be"

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Re: Raymond

Post by KateZiervogel » Sun Nov 23, 2014 2:52 pm

Lol many thanks. You make me feel most welcome

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