The Last Damocles

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The Last Damocles

Post by ROU Killing Time » Sun Aug 02, 2009 8:26 pm

Wo-Man's silver form trembled upon the throne, an avatar of the interconnected and unified Minds comprised of humanities quadrillions who had reached their penultimate evolutionary form.

They beheld within themselves the potentials for limitless creativity and complexity.

They shuddered at the realization that just as easily with a thought, they could destroy all.

Dionysius spoke.

"I have kept my part, Wo-Man and you now know what I've felt upon the throne. Come forth."

Stepping down from the dais, a thundering crack deafened them all as the gossamer strand snapped, sending the dark sword of oblivion crashing into the throne below.


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(edited because I got the reference backwards and I didn't like the original title...)

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Post by LajesticVantrashellofLob » Mon Aug 03, 2009 3:40 pm

I'm not sure if I understand what's going on here, but somehow that doesn't really matter... :D
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Post by ROU Killing Time » Mon Aug 03, 2009 6:07 pm

LajesticVantrashellofLob wrote:I'm not sure if I understand what's going on here, but somehow that doesn't really matter... :D
googling "Damocles" or "Sword of Damocles" will get you the background myth.

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Post by LajesticVantrashellofLob » Wed Aug 05, 2009 2:55 pm

Found it - the drabble makes that much more sense now, and is quite possibly that much more awesome as well.
Philosophy is a game with objectives and no rules. Mathematics is a game with rules and no objectives.

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Post by Mr. Tweedy » Wed Aug 05, 2009 3:08 pm

I don't get it...
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Post by strawman » Wed Aug 05, 2009 5:35 pm

You have the Sword of Damocles element.
You have the Wo-Man element.
You have the mind-meld of quadrillions element.
Is Damocles the silver avatar?
Too much guessing to know precisely what is intended.
But the Damocles element is all about the burden of precarious security.
To cut the thread is to eliminate the burden, rending the point as well as the thread.
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Post by ROU Killing Time » Wed Aug 05, 2009 6:38 pm

Guilty on all counts. Bottoming my list of my drabbles for the reasons outlined above.

Way to busy. Point to vague.

(I'm glad you liked it Lajestic, but I'm still not happy with the result myself... Much happier with "Yarn" which I just posted... /shameless pimping of latest drabble/

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Post by LajesticVantrashellofLob » Tue Aug 11, 2009 12:46 am

I must say that, even before looking things up to have any idea what was going on, I liked the imagery. From "penultimate evolutionary form" to "gossamer strand", it seemed like while there was certainly something going on, it really didn't matter. One of those cases where the journey is more important than the destination, I suppose.
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Post by ROU Killing Time » Tue Aug 11, 2009 12:48 am

Eek, you bumped my least favorite drabble to the top...

Shame on you...

/waggles finger ;-)

Quick post a reply to Sympathy for a Clown, or Perchance to Dream.

I'm actually kinda proud of those.

(re-reading it, I guess it doesn't suck quite as badly as I previously thought, so I figured I'd note that. not enough to bump it by making a new post, but enough to edit my last post on the topic...)

I like the "Penultimate" line too, but mostly just because it's such a good SF word. My favorite SF title of all-time is PKD's "The Penultimate Truth"

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