Ocean Noir

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beachbum21k
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Ocean Noir

Post by beachbum21k » Thu Jan 15, 2015 7:30 pm

The water rushes over me pressing me into the nets. My lungs burn, yearning for air.
I knew that cow was trouble when she came into my office.
I puff out my blowhole but still no air.
“Mr. Bottle!” It’s Timmy, the orphan crab who follows me around. For the first time I’m elated to see him. He clips the net and I swim to the surface gulping the air. I hate being a dolphin.
“Thanks Tim,” I say as he put’s my fedora back on my head. The fishing ship chugs away, its torn net flapping in the waves.

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Re: Ocean Noir

Post by strawman » Fri Jan 16, 2015 12:19 am

I knew that cow was trouble when she came into my office?
I don't get it. a private dick line?
I hate being a dolphin?
I don't believe it. Of all creatures, Dolphins cannot conceivably hate being dolphins.
“Mr. Bottle!” It’s Timmy
Would be better to separate into two lines
fishing ship
Can't help but read as "fish 'n chips".
Never judge anyone until you have biopsied their brain.

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Re: Ocean Noir

Post by SpareInch » Sat Jan 17, 2015 11:41 am

I want more Mr. Bottle stories! The idea of a dolphin detective is just too good to abandon.
strawman wrote:I knew that cow was trouble when she came into my office?
I don't get it. a private dick line?
In whales and dolphins, the females are called cows and the males are called bulls. Don't ask me why, because they don't have horns.

Apart from Narwhales, of course. Although come to think of it, that's a tusk.
strawman wrote:fishing ship
Can't help but read as "fish 'n chips".
With or without Mushy Peas?
The truth may be out there, but lies are inside your head.

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Re: Ocean Noir

Post by strawman » Sat Jan 17, 2015 1:51 pm

[quote="SpareInch"
In whales and dolphins, the females are called cows and the males are called bulls. Don't ask me why, because they don't have horns.
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Thanks, but your explanation stopped before it got the the part where the light turns on. It was a stretch to guess the trope was being evoked to indicate the dolphin was a private eye. Wouldn't have connected without the title.
Thank goodness to Prarie Home Companion for that.
Never judge anyone until you have biopsied their brain.

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Known Some Call Is Air Am
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Non sum qualis eram = "I am not who I will be"

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Re: Ocean Noir

Post by SpareInch » Sat Jan 17, 2015 2:39 pm

strawman wrote:
SpareInch wrote: In whales and dolphins, the females are called cows and the males are called bulls. Don't ask me why, because they don't have horns.
Thanks, but your explanation stopped before it got the the part where the light turns on. It was a stretch to guess the trope was being evoked to indicate the dolphin was a private eye. Wouldn't have connected without the title.
Thank goodness to Prarie Home Companion for that.
Maybe you just aren't cracked enough for this one?
The truth may be out there, but lies are inside your head.

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Re: Ocean Noir

Post by strawman » Sat Jan 17, 2015 7:05 pm

SpareInch wrote: Maybe you just aren't cracked enough for this one?
Well, that's the first time anyone has said THAT about me.
Never judge anyone until you have biopsied their brain.

"Be kind, for everyone is fighting a hard battle."
Known Some Call Is Air Am
Spoiler:
Non sum qualis eram = "I am not who I will be"

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