Niko

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arachnophile
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Niko

Post by arachnophile » Wed Apr 08, 2015 11:22 pm

It feels like a punch, a belly-blow that doubles Niko half-over, but the blade twists and withdraws then, and the blood comes pouring out. Unfair, he thinks. His first bar, and his first fight. His life flashes before him.

Not his past life, though. His future.

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“I don’t get it,” Carrie says. “He was bleeding out. Why was he fighting me?”

Marcus shrugs.

“You see it sometimes. Like hypothermia victims getting naked... see it more and more lately, honestly.

She strips off her gloves.

“His eyes,” she says. “He was terrified. I wonder what he was seeing?”

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Re: Niko

Post by zcarter80 » Fri Apr 10, 2015 6:49 am

To build a scene in a few words is hard but you nailed it I'd love to see more of your work.
If I wrote it you can read it unless you sound like Fran Drescher.

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Re: Niko

Post by arachnophile » Fri Apr 10, 2015 12:46 pm

Thanks for the kind words. If you're really interested, you could take a peek here: http://smart-as-a-bee.tumblr.com/

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