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Niko

Posted: Wed Apr 08, 2015 11:22 pm
by arachnophile
It feels like a punch, a belly-blow that doubles Niko half-over, but the blade twists and withdraws then, and the blood comes pouring out. Unfair, he thinks. His first bar, and his first fight. His life flashes before him.

Not his past life, though. His future.

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“I don’t get it,” Carrie says. “He was bleeding out. Why was he fighting me?”

Marcus shrugs.

“You see it sometimes. Like hypothermia victims getting naked... see it more and more lately, honestly.

She strips off her gloves.

“His eyes,” she says. “He was terrified. I wonder what he was seeing?”

Re: Niko

Posted: Fri Apr 10, 2015 6:49 am
by zcarter80
To build a scene in a few words is hard but you nailed it I'd love to see more of your work.

Re: Niko

Posted: Fri Apr 10, 2015 12:46 pm
by arachnophile
Thanks for the kind words. If you're really interested, you could take a peek here: http://smart-as-a-bee.tumblr.com/