Sympathy for a Clown, Part 3: Postdrabble

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Sympathy for a Clown, Part 3: Postdrabble

Post by ROU Killing Time » Tue Aug 11, 2009 3:02 am

The assailants were on him in a flash, striking out of nowhere in the mornings wee hours.

Only the flickering of the fluorescent lights in the Fastmart bore witness to the crime.

The frightened clerk had looked away, not wanting to attract attention.

A club crashed into the side of Gummy the Clown's skull.

He felt his stomach being pried open, the contents ripped free like silver entrails in the hands of ravenous zombies.

Departing with their pockets full of quarters and gumballs, two teenagers ran laughing into the night.

As he lay quietly dying, Gummy silently thanked his killers.

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Post by strawman » Tue Aug 11, 2009 3:22 am

A new literary form is born. A novel with drabble chapters. Or, death by a thousand cuts.
Never judge anyone until you have biopsied their brain.

"Be kind, for everyone is fighting a hard battle."
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Post by ROU Killing Time » Tue Aug 11, 2009 3:26 am

Unlike my previous duet, I tried my best to make these all be able to stand alone, but have the broader story told when they are put together.

This might be it for Gummy the Clown however since a) I don't care how good I am, getting sympathy for clowns is a real tough sell and b) I can't think of anything clever to come up with to follow "Postdrabble"

(btw, I shuddered when I saw the first post was from you, Strawman... like OMIGAWD what did I f-up this time...)

Gotta love Miss Grimsley, ya know I bet she was a real hottie when she was a 20 year old school marm.

(P.S., Miss Grimsley, you didn't catch that I said "neon" where I should have said "flourescent")

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Post by Phenopath » Tue Aug 11, 2009 7:22 pm

I think that the Prodrabble was my favourite. Perhaps it stood alone best, but also I liked the warped image and I had the greatest sympathy for that clown.

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Post by Phenopath » Tue Aug 11, 2009 7:32 pm

Dude it looks like you have also snagged the auspicious hundredth drabble posted in the forums.

The Drabbles section is on fire!

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Post by ROU Killing Time » Tue Aug 11, 2009 8:17 pm

Phenopath wrote:Dude it looks like you have also snagged the auspicious hundredth drabble posted in the forums.

The Drabbles section is on fire!
Looks like it, although the 100th drabble really would be number 101, (Since I posted the re-write of Dinnertime as the separate post "Fine Dining" and I really don't think that shuld count as two.)

But, ya, this forum has really been popping. Been enjoying your's, Laj's, and can't say enough good about Chivalrybean's stuff.

Tweedy and Strawman have been kind of slacking lately though (except in the editorial department where Strawman/Miss Grimsley is unequaled.)

Tweeds, man does not live by moderation alone... :)

More healthy competition is a good thing, imo.

Currently I'm sitting at 28 percent of the posted Drabbles, (and a couple of them aren't half bad.)

Catch me if you can.

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Post by Mr. Tweedy » Tue Aug 11, 2009 8:28 pm

I wrote a twit-fic last night...

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Post by strawman » Tue Aug 11, 2009 10:08 pm

Snap out of it, Tweedy. Remember, you're the freakin CZAR.

ROU, think reincarnation of "Mr. Bill". Weekly episode.
"O, NOOOOO!"
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Post by ROU Killing Time » Tue Aug 11, 2009 10:10 pm

strawman wrote:Snap out of it, Tweedy. Remember, you're the freakin CZAR.

ROU, think reincarnation of "Mr. Bill". Weekly episode.
"O, NO!"
Strawman, I need you to get in touch with Miss Grimsley and see if Pheno is right about the similie in Part 1 needing attention.

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Post by strawman » Tue Aug 11, 2009 10:31 pm

Miss Grimsley says to tell you that she has cut and pasted that sentence on her kitchen floor and thrown her hip out playing Twister on it. She says to tell you, "How's that for a swingin' metaphor, sweetmeats?"

Also, she sez she's a grammatician, not a physicist, but she's looking forward to fluorescent neon before she ever expects to find flourescence in the dictionary. She suggests you propose it to The Pillsbury company as a candidate for a new line of baked goods aroma-therapy.

Also, she thinks you're hot. She's thinking latex...

O God! My EYES!!!! :mrgreen: :twisted: :mrgreen:
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Post by ROU Killing Time » Tue Aug 11, 2009 10:54 pm

strawman wrote:Miss Grimsley says to tell you that she has cut and pasted that sentence on her kitchen floor and thrown her hip out playing Twister on it. She says to tell you, "How's that for a swingin' metaphor, sweetmeats?"

Also, she sez she's a grammatician, not a physicist, but she's looking forward to fluorescent neon before she ever expects to find flourescence in the dictionary. She suggests you propose it to The Pillsbury company as a candidate for a new line of baked goods aroma-therapy.

Also, she thinks you're hot. She's thinking latex...

O God! My EYES!!!! :mrgreen: :twisted: :mrgreen:
I'm not sure if that means it needs a re-write or not.
As for Flourescence, she needs to update the encyclopedia's she purchased from the door to door salesman 75 years ago.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Fluorescent_lamp

And as for the latex... hmmm, sweaty...

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Post by strawman » Tue Aug 11, 2009 11:02 pm

I think it is a matter of juxtaposition of the letters of your name.
A) Fl OUR escent
B) Fl ROU escent
:arrow: C) Fl UOR escent

Capeesh?
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Post by ROU Killing Time » Tue Aug 11, 2009 11:44 pm

strawman wrote:I think it is a matter of juxtaposition of the letters of your name.
A) Fl OUR escent
B) Fl ROU escent
:arrow: C) Fl UOR escent

Capeesh?
LOL, oops, ya i get it. Guess I better cancel my entry into the national spelling bee.

All hail the Strawman: channeller of the Miss Grimsley, "proof-reader of the stars" (and of ROU Killing Time)

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