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Re: Post your Twitfic Twabbles Here! (General Content)

Posted: Wed Aug 23, 2017 6:11 am
by Macha
When flesh was cut away from fabric, would she think the pain was worth it? She smirked. Of course. She would be level ten!

Re: Post your Twitfic Twabbles Here! (General Content)

Posted: Sat Oct 07, 2017 7:26 pm
by Klaymen
Having slain the Nemean Lion, the Lernaean Hydra and the Stymphalian Birds, Hercules has been detained by Greenpeace.

An Early Morning

Posted: Thu Oct 26, 2017 5:25 pm
by Antipodes
Sis, go look outside. It's 2 A.M. and the sun's coming up! Hurry up, it's fading! Did you see it Sis? Sis? Damn cellphones!

Just having fun

Posted: Fri Oct 27, 2017 10:01 pm
by Antipodes
I am fairly new listener and a brand new poster - this is only my second post.
I'm just wondering what criticisms all you twabble-gurus may have for me, and which one of these variants you may prefer, and why:

"Usurper"
Night skulks on the far side of the world, out of Sun's sight. Sun must never see her. She plots to emerge, to take revenge.

"Usurpers"
The nights hide on the far sides of the worlds where Sun can never see them. They plot to emerge, to overthrow her tyranny.

Sleazeball

Posted: Tue Oct 31, 2017 9:37 pm
by Antipodes
She was beautiful in blue, wrapped in wispy white. Mars inched closer. Then he noticed the little drab child. Forget it!

(btw: Am I the only one here? Hello... Hello!)

Re: Sleazeball

Posted: Sat Nov 11, 2017 1:37 am
by Algernon Sydney is Dead
Antipodes wrote:(btw: Am I the only one here? Hello... Hello!)

Pretty much; sorry.

I drop by OIABM to sweep spam under the rug...

Re: Just having fun

Posted: Sat Nov 11, 2017 1:52 am
by Algernon Sydney is Dead
Antipodes wrote:... which one of these variants you may prefer, and why:

"Usurper"
Night skulks on the far side of the world, out of Sun's sight. Sun must never see her. She plots to emerge, to take revenge.
...


I prefer that first version. It's clearer and the voice more "active".

Possible variant:
Sun must never see her, so Night hides her dark heart on the far side of the world. She'll have revenge one, uh.. day.
Crap.