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surely a hundred poems is no great calamity!

Post by secretnude » Wed Dec 11, 2013 2:17 am

I got almost booted out in a few days in this forum.
I wish we could have something like a quorum
on whether what I did on the whole was harmful
since I am just being an innocent playful.

I can write more if you are not bored!
Just tell me the full score!

I am a poet boy new to the literary world
as my poetry, here I unfurled
in full glory for you to see,
surely a hundred poems is no great calamity!

If we compare that to tragically sad world around,
hence can some perspective be found?
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Re: Secretnude's Drabble Poetry Corner

Post by gunsofchekhovia » Wed Dec 11, 2013 5:59 am

Hey, secretnude. I'm nobody, but I say you're welcome. The issue, I think, is the rate at which you posted, as well as the necrothreading. We all do some weird things here. We take drabbling as a pastime and a challenge. We write in-theme and out-of-theme, and we try to tell the best stories we can, 100 words at a time, and that's pretty weird. But when you post so many pieces as quickly as you did on arrival, it does tend to frustrate the aims of the community.

I also agree with Varda (not that my agreement is necessary at all) that if you feel inspired by someone's much earlier post, you should link to the earlier piece rather than commenting on it.

Just out of curiosity, are these poems typical examples of your work, or is this a style you're just trying out here? Does the word-count requirement push you in a certain direction stylistically? Also, do you write any prose?

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I am not a fool trying to disrupt this community.

Post by secretnude » Wed Dec 11, 2013 7:04 am

I have never saved my early attempts to write but if memory serves me right,
I was best in creative writing in High School.

I wrote prose essays on topics that are cool.

I am not a fool trying to disrupt this community.
I want an opportunity for my words to be heard.

I am such a big nerd!
I have been published in a scientific journal, I know that is not normal!

Writing in 100 words makes ideas more tight, and a bit more right.
Brevity is fun if there is some levity!

Writing poetry only for two months.
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Re: Secretnude's Drabble Poetry Corner

Post by Varda » Wed Dec 11, 2013 7:19 am

Hiya Secretnude - I bet you're waiting to hear from me.

Gunsofchekhovia has summed everything up quite nicely. You're more than welcome here, and no need to feel bad about a couple missteps while you were learning the rules. :)

One thing I'd like to point out is that the Drabbles subforum is specifically for 100-word stories, not just 100-word pieces of writing in general. Since you've heard all the Drabblecast episodes, I'm sure you see what I mean - Drabbles should have characters, plot, and setting. I noticed that a lot of your poems seem more like straightforward poems about different subjects that interest you, which is great, but not what we're trying to do on this particular subforum. That's one of the reasons I asked you to limit your poetry-posting to just a handful a day, so as to keep the Drabbles forum about writing Drabbles in the Drabblecast sense. Other genres of writing are wonderful, but this is a space for a more specific kind of writing.

Given that, why not shake things up a bit? You've written a very impressive library of drabble-poems. How about writing us a more traditional prose story?

I really appreciate your cooperativeness, by the way, and I hope you do stick around and enjoy the community. It's truly a great one.
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I hope to stay in this forum. I will keep proper decorum.

Post by secretnude » Wed Dec 11, 2013 12:28 pm

I am glad that I have not overstayed my welcome.
I do not derive any income from writing except from technical specifications and computer codes.

I love shifting to a literary mode, since literature will surely outlive any computer code I give.

I apologise for any missteps in my baby steps here, from me you have nothing to fear.
I hope to stay in this forum. I will keep proper decorum.

A new Drabble prose thread could be rose garden for my imagination to play and stay until the world blows away.
It is a challenge that I can't refuse.
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Post by Varda » Wed Dec 11, 2013 3:07 pm

Exxxxxxcellent! >:-D

I can't wait to see what you come up with!
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Post by tbaker2500 » Wed Dec 11, 2013 4:37 pm

I hope to stay in this forum. I will keep proper decorum.
:lol: :lol: Ok that is awesome. :D

What movie was it, Princess Bride? That someone got into extended rhyming?

I like Varda's challenge. Take your rhyming and focus on adding an engaging storyline. Raise the bar, so to speak.
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Re: Secretnude's Drabble Poetry Corner

Post by gunsofchekhovia » Wed Dec 11, 2013 6:32 pm

tbaker2500 wrote:
What movie was it, Princess Bride? That someone got into extended rhyming?
No more rhymes, now, I mean it!

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Post by Cutter McKay » Wed Dec 11, 2013 9:54 pm

gunsofchekhovia wrote: No more rhymes, now, I mean it!
Anybody want a pecan? :P
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Re: Secretnude's Drabble Poetry Corner

Post by Varda » Wed Dec 11, 2013 9:57 pm

Cutter McKay wrote:
gunsofchekhovia wrote: No more rhymes, now, I mean it!
Anybody want a pecan? :P
*SPLORT* :lol: :lol: :lol:
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JokeRat asked "Why so serious the curious one?"

Post by secretnude » Thu Dec 12, 2013 2:09 am

Grumpy ManCat, the curiously serious feline detective, is very effective is solving crimes for nary a dime.

ManCat has an utility pelt that has amazing stealth and gadgets galore, we got to explore.

ManCat felt safe and strong and could do no wrong in the Cat City where he belong but one fateful day he met his nemesis, the JokeRat of his genesis, who bit off ManCat's parents as if that is not apparent.

The JokeRat asked, "Why so serious the curious one, why not have some fun?".

Hence a gun aimed at the ManCat's head!
Is ManCat now dead?
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Re: JokeRat asked "Why so serious the curious one?"

Post by strawman » Thu Dec 12, 2013 2:37 am

secretnude wrote: bit off ManCat's parents as if that is not apparent.
I could not let it pass without venturing a guess that you have renditioned the English Language to your underground bunker, and your objective appears to be to torture it into a confession of some sort.

This in spite of the fact that the English language is guilty of nothing... and it is really difficult to concentrate while listening to it's screams.

I'm sorry, secretnude, this may sound cruel
But your poetic power needs more fuel
Biting ManCat's parents left you hanging from your roof.
Where not a thing's apparent... *(Ain't THAT the truth?) :P

* Note to ASID: You've got to say "dot, dot, dot" here.
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Post by Varda » Thu Dec 12, 2013 3:43 am

Um, I *love* the idea of ManCat. I'm thinking he's a cat that got bitten by a radioactive man, thus imbuing him with man-like powers - namely, opposable thumbs (thus, the utility pelt). Nice wordplay on this one, Secretnude! Really enjoyed reading it!
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ManCat Begins

Post by secretnude » Thu Dec 12, 2013 12:25 pm

ManCat begins life as a tiny orphan kitty adopted by a laboratory run by Dr. Mitty, a rogue genetic engineer who did not fear pushing the envelope, who made a glowing antelope.

Dr. Mitty designed a virus, just because he is curious, to insert human DNA into any animal, let us say.

First subject a rat, did escape containment and laughed away like crazy!
Now called the JokeRat by the press, so lazy!

Enter subject number two, the to be ManCat for you.
The ManCat by plain chance, did brain get enhanced and gain tiny thumbs to pick up crumbs.
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Post by Varda » Thu Dec 12, 2013 3:47 pm

Ladies and Gentlemen, cats with thumbs. :mrgreen:
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ManCat was named Grumpy like his famous Auntie on the net.

Post by secretnude » Thu Dec 12, 2013 9:34 pm

Dr. Mitty was impressed by his tiny ManKitty with an IQ probably higher than you, which is not just my view.

ManKitty was so much a grump, Dr. Mitty was stumped!
Henceforth the ManCat was named Grumpy like his famous Auntie on the net.

Grumpy as a laboratory assistant was set.
Grumpy designed a pelt resistant to all manner of harm and a tiny cape to keep him warm.

Pelt has adaptive camo and all sorts of ammo so cool that when Grumpy was a foolish teen he was tempted to give it a spin and on evil do win!
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Re: ManCat was named Grumpy like his famous Auntie on the ne

Post by strawman » Thu Dec 12, 2013 10:01 pm

secretnude wrote:Dr. Mitty was impressed by his tiny ManKitty with an IQ probably higher than you, which is not just my view.
Just when Strawman is about to congratulate you on your recovery from that unfortunate ManCat incident,
secretnude wrote: he was tempted to give it a spin and on evil do win!
When Noriega was hunkered down in his lair before the army nabbed him, I think this is what they played over loudspeakers in the square all night.

I am no longer impressed by your tiny ManKitty.
Never judge anyone until you have biopsied their brain.

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Re: ManCat was named Grumpy like his famous Auntie on the ne

Post by secretnude » Thu Dec 12, 2013 10:20 pm

strawman wrote:
secretnude wrote:Dr. Mitty was impressed by his tiny ManKitty with an IQ probably higher than you, which is not just my view.
Just when Strawman is about to congratulate you on your recovery from that unfortunate ManCat incident,
secretnude wrote: he was tempted to give it a spin and on evil do win!
When Noriega was hunkered down in his lair before the army nabbed him, I think this is what they played over loudspeakers in the square all night.

I am no longer impressed by your tiny ManKitty.
I really do not care about your opinion, my skin is not as thin as an onion!
I write for free, no need to denigrate me.
If others do enjoy what I do here, from you I have nothing to fear.
You insist on writing on this thread, I will have to talk to you I dread.
If the stories you do not like, then feel free to take a hike.
If you keep up this kind of attack without tact, with you I do not wish to interact.
I wish I could give a refund but such is moribund.
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Re: Secretnude's Drabble Poetry Corner

Post by strawman » Thu Dec 12, 2013 10:59 pm

Sorry, my friend, there just are no normal social rules to guide me. I am glad that you are not thin-skinned, as I am really not trying to offend you. My mother never taught me how to act around someone whose sole form of communication connects random mirrored vowels and consonant pairs to see if sense results.

I don't want to patronize you. I think it's more respectful of you as a person to engage you, as honestly as I can. It seems to me that the rhyming construct is a kind of disguise. You have not broken out of rhyming role to explain yourself, when others have tried to engage you. You don't break out of it in responding to my provocations.

That is strange. And this is a place where strange listeners are greatly esteemed. Think of this place as the alien bar in Star Wars.

The last episode was about this issue. Your arrival is almost as if the Squid had liked Norm's reading, and decided to join the DC forums. And we just don't get that the squid can only speak in rhymes.

If your skin is not thin, then you should wish to interact. Because I have a hunch if you could interact, your poetry might start to make sense.

So anyway,
Never judge anyone until you have biopsied their brain.

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I am a misfit, strange and slightly deranged.

Post by secretnude » Thu Dec 12, 2013 11:19 pm

I am a misfit, strange and slightly deranged.
I have an online persona like the sun's corona hiding the stellar core yet to be explored.

I do not like my mother too I guess like you.
I am glad that you are not simply after me as now I see.

I do like that you point out weakness in plot and story.
In trying to construct verse in story I can be sometimes adverse.

I am glad that you are friendly and not simply an enemy.
Your motives to me matters as I did not have it in a platter.
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