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Pogo

Post by TheBigBadG » Mon Jul 01, 2013 11:19 am

I dreamt the cascading, bubbling giggles of a child as she flew across the room, pogoing recklessly from her drip stand. The mother I knew was severe, restrained. I awoke consumed by grief, scaring Laura immensely. Dad insisted Mum had changed after I was born.

The next day in the stroke ward, when I slumped in the chair next to her bed, tense and drained by the hospital's environment, I saw the dents in the ceiling. Mum didn't speak to me as usual, and now her eyes were fixed on the ceiling. The half of her face that could smiled.

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Post by Varda » Mon Jul 01, 2013 4:26 pm

This one is excellent -- pure happy. I bet she's down the hall from the old dame in "At the End of the Hall".
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Re: Pogo

Post by TheBigBadG » Mon Jul 01, 2013 5:58 pm

Thank you - I wasn't sure if it came out happy or not if I'm being completely honest. I prefer the happy take though!

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Post by strawman » Mon Jul 01, 2013 6:06 pm

It's hard not to think of the happy take when you've got At the End of the Hall in your head. Or Delianne Forget's voice.
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Re: Pogo

Post by MonsieurMoustache » Tue Jul 02, 2013 1:55 am

I get the happy vibe with more re-readings, but I can't seem to shake this strange guilt and regret while reading either. Perhaps bittersweet? There is something strange here...

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Post by TheBigBadG » Tue Jul 02, 2013 7:59 am

So I'm going to have to confess ignoramusness to this lady at the end of the hall. Have I unwittingly copied someone else's homework?

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Re: Pogo

Post by TheBigBadG » Tue Jul 02, 2013 10:04 am

Wait, #211, right? I'm Bone Sigh (#134) at the moment, and came in at about From the Lost Diary of TreeFrog7 (#238) so I haven't got there yet. Dammit.

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Post by strawman » Tue Jul 02, 2013 12:03 pm

TheBigBadG wrote:Wait, #211, right? I'm Bone Sigh (#134) at the moment, and came in at about From the Lost Diary of TreeFrog7 (#238) so I haven't got there yet. Dammit.
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Re: Pogo

Post by PhineasQP » Tue Jul 02, 2013 12:18 pm

This one starts out in a minor key and winds up kinda Do-Re-Mi. I like it.
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Re: Pogo

Post by TheBigBadG » Tue Jul 02, 2013 12:20 pm

strawman wrote:To quote the Asian lady in Jelly Park: "Ooo, so close now!"
I know! Queue sense of satisfied indulgent emptiness in 134 episodes' time. Incidentally, the talented Ms Whiteley of Jelly Park fame has a new collection of short stories out, which includes Witchcraft in the Harem. It's really good. so in the time-honoured tradition of altruistic plugs, BUYBUYBUY! Witchcraft in the Harem

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Re: Pogo

Post by Varda » Tue Jul 02, 2013 12:26 pm

You're in for a treat. "At the End of the Hall" is one of my favorite DC episodes ever. The first time I heard it, I relistened to it two more times in 48 hours.

Of course, I'm still working my way through the backlog too. Haven't heard anything between #44 and #176, randomly enough. We'll have to compare "Best-of" lists when we're done. :D
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