Stepping Through
- JoshPeters
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Stepping Through
The full moon shone on a vine covered doorway standing atop a cliff. The vines swayed in the breeze as a young man pulled himself up then leaned over and lifted his companion.
Together they removed the vines, revealing glowing glyphs and a keyhole. The dark wood of the ancient door absorbed the moonlight.
Jose lifted a chain from around his neck to reveal a silver key. He and Kat locked eyes.
"Are you sure you want to do this?"
Kat laughed.
"Do you think I would change my mind now?"
Together they turned the key and opened the door.
Together they removed the vines, revealing glowing glyphs and a keyhole. The dark wood of the ancient door absorbed the moonlight.
Jose lifted a chain from around his neck to reveal a silver key. He and Kat locked eyes.
"Are you sure you want to do this?"
Kat laughed.
"Do you think I would change my mind now?"
Together they turned the key and opened the door.
Re: Stepping Through
Oooooo!
Reminds me of Prof Chronotis's apartment in Douglas Adams's 'Dirk Gently's Holistic Detective Agency'
WANT SEQUEL NOW!
Reminds me of Prof Chronotis's apartment in Douglas Adams's 'Dirk Gently's Holistic Detective Agency'
WANT SEQUEL NOW!

The truth may be out there, but lies are inside your head.
- JoshPeters
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Re: Stepping Through
It's been a long time since I read that, perhaps it's time for a refresher...
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Re: Stepping Through
That's a nice mood you've captured. Very cool.
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I quite agree. This has really whetted my appetite for more please, Josh.Caustic Reverie wrote:That's a nice mood you've captured. Very cool.
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Re: Stepping Through
That is a very nice story that you've written, and i really enjoyed it.
My only criticism is that you used 'vines' three times, and that gets repetitive. If you merged the first two occurrences of the word, I think it would improve the story's structure.
As I said, it was a fun story.
My only criticism is that you used 'vines' three times, and that gets repetitive. If you merged the first two occurrences of the word, I think it would improve the story's structure.
As I said, it was a fun story.