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- Thu Aug 22, 2019 8:32 pm
- Forum: Drabbles
- Topic: Footprints in the Sand (probable blasphemy)
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Ooooh, SNAP! This is a really good one. I love anything that makes fun of the plastic posters plastered all over my school libraries growing up, so this gets a standing ovation from me
I liked the early part where the soul was fed to creditors. Felt that was going somewhere interesting. The end is good, but there's something about 'you lived without a soul for years and never noticed' that I find intriguing.
You can't run from it. It'll pull you under, drawing you into itself. You'll have to breathe eventually. You are one with the wave and the wave is you. At first, you'll struggle. Then you'll accept it. The wave will take you away. Perhaps it will have mercy and spit you out again in a faraway place....
I saw him dancing and swaying through the cornfields in the pale moonlight. A husk in tattered rags, his dead limbs creaked like an old barn door. I could feel it as he looked at me from the places where eyes used to be. I've tried to get away from him, but still he follows me. He wants my feet to j...
Yup, it does! I think it can be phrased better. Thanks!kwooderson wrote:Yep, a hundred words exactly. Makes sense as far as I can see, though I'm not partial to 'toned inviting physique' -there's something off about it. Hope that helps?
How could you, Brian? Why do you possess so little self-control? Why did you have to meet that woman? What was it? The golden hair? Her toned, inviting physique? You’ve kept yourself in check so long. But now I see the true you. I think we'll have to move on to other people. Again! And I'd just gott...